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Question: Some parents believe that cellphones are harmful to children, while others disagree. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.Essay:It is believed by some parents that mobile phones have negative influence on their kids while others think the opposite. This essay agrees that cellphones do more harm than good for children. This essay will discuss both views.On the one hand, there are several compelling reasons why some people think that cellphones are beneficial, Firstly, pocessing a mobile phone can keep children safe. It is because children can contact their parents or the police for help in case of an emergency, which ensures their personal security. Secondly, smartphones offer youngsters a variety of applications supporting their study. As a result, children have the opportunity to study everywhere at any time. For example, there are currently a large number of websites, apps or online courses which help students learn English more productively like 4english or lingoda.On the other hand, I would argue that cellphones have adverse effects on children's lives. First, since some kids use their smartphones on a daily routine, they may bear the risk of radiation exposure. In fact, screens from these devices emit harmful blue light, which leads to headache and visual impairments. Second, by going online via their gadgets, children may come across uncensored or unreliable sources of information. This means that somes kids who are innocent or immature fail to evaluate the reliability of the information they read, which can mislead their ways of thinking.In conclusion, despite some obvious advantages of cellphones, I personally reckon that these devices are more than toxic if not properly utilized.

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It is believed by some parents that mobile phones have negative influence (Either "a negative influence" or "negative influences") on their kids while others think the opposite. ~~This essay agrees that cellphones do more harm than good for children. This essay will discuss both views.~~

It is bad form, substandard style, to mention your writing, your paragraphs, your essay, or what you are going to tell the reader in an academic essay. Learn to avoid this kind of writing!

Essays do not have opinion, only people have them. The prompt asked for your opinion, so answer it directly e.g. "My opinion is.." or "In my perspective cellphones ..." or "I firmly believe ..." There are many ways to assert your views.

Do not write "this essay will discuss both views". This is "announcement" style, which is inferior. Delete this sentence.

You will get better marks when you write a clear "thesis statement" in the first paragraph. The thesis statement is the main point of your essay. I have written an example thesis statement for your essay:

Both sides of the argument have their merits, but I definitely take the stance that these devices are not suitable for young children because of their harmful effects.

The first part of the statement "both sides", tells the reader you are going to present justifications for each side.

The second part of the thesis statement, "but I .." clearly asserts your opinion and the main point of your essay.

On the one hand, there are several compelling reasons why some people think that cellphones are beneficial, ~~Firstly~~, First, pocessing a mobile phone can keep children safe. It is because children can contact their parents or the police for help in case of an emergency, which ensures their personal security. ~~Secondly~~, Second, smartphones offer them ~~youngsters~~ (Not a good synonym) a variety of applications supporting their schoolwork. ~~study~~. (Study is for higher education. Elementary school children have schoolwork.) As a result, they ~~children~~ have the opportunity to study everywhere at any time. For example, there are currently a large number of websites, apps or online courses like 4english or lingoda which help students learn English more productively. ~~like 4english or lingoda~~.

On the other hand, I would argue that cellphones have adverse effects on children's lives. First, since some kids use their smartphones on a daily routine, ( "daily", "every day", "frequently" "as part of their daily routine). they ~~may~~ bear the risk of radiation exposure. In fact, screens from these devices emit harmful blue light, which leads to headache and visual impairments. Second, by going online via their gadgets, (wrong usage. A gadget is a small useful tool for the kitchen, garage, or office) children may come across uncensored or unreliable sources of information. This means that somes kids who are innocent or immature fail to evaluate the reliability of the information they read, which can mislead their ways of thinking.

In conclusion, despite some obvious advantages of cellphones, I personally reckon (This is an informal word.) that these devices are more than toxic (wrong usage. - toxic refers to poisonous chemicals.) if not properly utilized.

Vocabulary: gadgets

Kitchen Gadgets

Electronic Gadgets

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