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The line graph indicates the consumption of 3 kinds of book: adults’fiction, children’book and education’book in one country from 2002 to 2006.

Over all, it is clear that children’book has the sales higher than the other 2 types of book.

Frist of all, there is significant increase of con sumption of children and education’s book in 4 years. In 2002, the book sold out was 33 milions and there was sharply increase to around 51 milions in 2006. The consumption of education’book has fluctuated between 25 and 33 milions from 2002 to 2006.

By contrast, the consumption of adult’s fiction complete opposite with 2 rest types of book. The aldult’s fiction sold out in 2002 was considerable high at 45 milions and there was slightly rise from 37 to 40 before the consumption decreased to 30 milions in 2006

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The line graph indicates (shows / plots / depicts) the consumption ( Wrong word. We do not eat books. They do not taste very good. ) of 3 kinds of book: (wrong form) adults’fiction, children’book and education’book in one country from 2002 to 2006.

The instructions for this Task 1 essay were not written by a native speaker of English. There is no such thing as "education's book" - these are textbooks. And it is "adult fiction" not "adult's fiction."

The following is native English:

The graph below shows the sales of adult fiction, children's books and textbooks between 2002 and 2006 in a certain country.

Suggested paraphrase.
The line graph plots the numbers of three different categories of books sold in a particular country during the four-year period starting in 2002 and ending in 2006. There are three categories: children's books, adult novels (fiction) and school books. The numbers are given in millions.

~~Over all, it is clear~~ ~~that~~ (Unnecessary words) children’book has the sales higher than the other 2 types of book. (wrong form) Also, it is an incorrect statement since the sales of adult fiction were higher during the first year.

There was a higher volume of sales of children's books than the other two types of books after the third quarter of 2002.
The number of children's books sold was higher than those of the other two categories of books, except in the first year, 2002 when adult fiction had greater numbers.

You need to add one more point in this paragraph. For example:

The total sales of all categories in 2006, 119 million, was about 15% higher than in 2002 (103 million).

Frist of all, there is significant increase of con sumption (wrong word) of children and education’s book in 4 years. In 2002, the book (wrong form) sold out was 33 milions (wrong form) and there was sharply (wrong form) increase to around 51 (wrong number) milions (wrong form) in 2006. The consumption (wrong word) of education’book has fluctuated (wrong word ) between 25 and 33 milions from 2002 to 2006.

Suggested paragraph:

Over the four years, there was a significant increase (nearly 70%) in the sales volume of children's books from 33 million in 2002 to 56 million in 2006. That contrasted with a marked decline by a third (33%) in adult fiction, from 45 to 25 million. Textbook sales averaged about 28 million per year, ranging between 25 and 33 million units.

By contrast, the consumption of adult’s fiction complete opposite with 2 rest types (wrong expression. There is no such thing as "rest type") of book. (wrong form) The aldult’s fiction sold out (wrong expression - sold out means that there were no more left over in the store.) in 2002 was considerable (wrong form) high at 45 milions and there was slightly (wrong form) rise from 37 to 40 before the consumption decreased to 30 milions in 2006 (missing punctuation)

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