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Prompt: Fashion and changing lifestyles
Do you think that fashion reflects changes in how people live? We would like to know how fashion in clothes has changed since your grandparents were young, and what this reveals about changes in society in your country.
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INDICATOR OF A BYGONE ERA
In my country,there was a time when monarchy was in existence.At that time,it was common practice that our forefathers were very subservient towards theirs rulers.As to fashion,they were not allowed to wear in a bright fashion,especially yellow because it was evocative of dominant power which only pertained to our rulers.In actuality,the vast majority of our ancestors were peasants so they mostly grativated more towards neutral one, which were more suitable for manual work.
FASHION IN MODERN DAY
In this day and age, our country is open to novelty Adolescents especially teen girls have total control of their choice in clothes.Moreover, we pay more attention to environmental and huminitarian aspects.Fisrt, we stress the importance of utilizing environment-friendly fabrics in the making of clothes.Secondly, we sucessfully enacted a child labor prohibition bill .Last but not least, our goverment is trying to standardize a nation-wide increase in minimum wages for workers by 20%.In my view ,most of fashion brands in my country can guarantee ethiticality.
FASHION IS A SYMBOL OF VARIOUS LIFESTYLES
It's common knowledge that fashion reflects changes in how people live.I am in favor of this perspective.For instance, i am a college student so i usually wear more comfy clothes such as pants and shirts,but my sister is a high-profile workers so she must follow a rigid dresscode at her work place.As she grows older and more mature, she dress in more feminine and elegent though in her college time she used to have the same sene of style as i do.
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You have a lot of spacing errors. You must put a space after an end stop (period), comma, and other punctuation marks. The only exceptions are quotation marks and the apostrophe.
- You have a lot of spacing errors.
- You must put a space after an end stop (period), comma, and other punctuation marks.
- The only exceptions are quotation marks and the apostrophe.
- You have a lot of grammatical and spelling errors.
- Besides, I do not understand how child labor and minimum-wage laws influence the choice of colors in clothing.
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You have a lot of spacing errors. You must put a space after an end stop (period), comma, and other punctuation marks. The only exceptions are quotation marks and the apostrophe. You have a lot of grammatical and spelling errors. Besides, I do not understand how child labor and minimum-wage laws influence the choice of colors in clothing. You need to make a connection.
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