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Some people believe that the salaries paid to professional sportspeople are too high, while others argue that sports salaries are fair.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.

ESSAY:

The debates around income of sportspeople is more and more on the increase, some people think that it is too high while the others believe that they completely deserve to get those salaries. In my opinion, the money paid to professional athlete is fair.
On the one hand, there is no denying that sports professionals earn too much money. In reality, they do not provide a vital service to people and also take more entertaining purpose. A typical example of it is the fact that football players earn enormous salaries by simply kicking a ball, it does not concentrate too much on the life. Additionally, we could all live happily without professional athletes and their competition because of always existing other form of recreations that people can take part in. Finally, it will be more useful for people if that amount of money was paid to professionals on other occupations such as medicine and teachers and the income of those jobs is necessary more highly.
Despite all of perceptions above, I believe that it is fair for sportspeople when the best sportspeople will earn a lot of money. Firstly, in modern society, the people’s demand for entertainment activities increases dramatically, which in turns promotes sports becoming a multi-million pound industry. As a result, there is a large audience of sports fans who are willing to pay for their favourite sports. Secondly, an abundance of athletes play an important role as an inspiring person to encourage the life of other people by their unending perseverance. In addition, being a top sportsperson requires a period of long time to practice, even they have to barter so many things for their succeed in the career.
In conclusion, when there are some opinions assuming that the salaries for sportspeople is too high, I believe that they deserve those incomes.