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The line graph illustrates figure on how many London’s passengers in the Underground Station at a variety of times over the course of time between 6.00 am and 22.00 pm.
Looking at the picture, it is immediately obvious that passengers crowed at 8.00 am. In contrast, 6.00 am and 20.00 pm experienced the number of passengers which were at least.
At the beginning, the figure for passengers stood at 100 people. Then it made gather before reaching at a peak at 400 passengers. After that, it experienced a dramatic decreased at 9.00 and 10.00 am. Then, it rose slightly again and dropped sharply at 14.00 pm. After stay at a bottom with 100 passengers at 16.00pm, it has an upward trend. The numbers of people who arrived to underground station plummeted and it was approximately 390 at 18.00 pm. Finally, it significant decreased before fluctuated in the end of the period.
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- tieuyeunghiet The line graph illustrates figure on how many London’s passengers in the Underground S tation This is not good English.
- The red part is superfluous and the yellow part should be replaced.
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- org/wiki/London_Underground is a name so, it has capital letters.
- In this context, the word s tation is not a name so, it has a small s .
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tieuyeunghietThe line graph illustrates figure on how many London’s passengers in the Underground Station
This is not good English. The red part is superfluous and the yellow part should be replaced. It would be better to rewrite
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