Please read my IELTS writing task 2 !!!! HELP ME OUT pls

Topic:

Modern technology allows machines to perform the hard work instead of humans. does this have a positive or negative effect on people? give your own opinions and examples.

Essay:

Nowadays, people have been living in a dynamic-growing technology generation which allows automatic systems to replace human. This might have many pros and corns for people. All of two aspects will be included in the essay before final conclusions are drown.

In the one hand, by the convenience of machines might reduce the large amount of time to produce goods as well as increase the accuracy in the process of making products. Applying mordern technology to job can help the working process being faster and more effective. Therefore it also create the economic growth and development. Simultaneously, with the application of technology , people could spend more time on their personal life rather than work too hard. It comes to the result that the living standard has been getting better. Iam convinced that the well-being community will also decrease the crime rate as well.

On the other hand, there has been some conflicting view that technology facilities are more and more take over humans. In reality, there are so many companies cut down on the number of employees because of the machines’ replacement. It leads to the unexpected consequence that a lot of jobless people who have advanced skill and great experience are eliminated. Besides, people got intellectual ability and emotion that machines do not have. Technology or machines just support human to work better.

In conclusion, I tend towards the viewpoint that there is nothing can take over human. Modern technology is made just to serve human not to replace us.