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Anonymous Posted 14 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
please read and check my essay.
Some of my grammers is incorrect,
If you don't bother it, please check my errors in my essay.
My name is HyunJeong Yi, and I was born in February, 1986, Seoul. There are four of us in my family, my father, my mother, my twin brother and me. The daughter of an army officer, I had a somewhat nomadic childhood. With my bright and exuberant personality and good personal relationships, I adjusted and adapted very easily to new school and various environment.
I relish to get a thrill out of really testing situations. One of my hobbies is taking xxx test irregularly. Even there's no need to take a high score in exam, I just took it for fun which got a thrill to take a good grade after studying hard. Five years ago, I just took xxx in Vancouver, Canada, and got quite high score, 96. When I was a senior in my university, I wanted to challege the xxx,another test of xxx, and got over 850 in xxx in 2009. Finally, I decided to take xxx just one month ago. Even though my grade for the xxx was not so good, I am not afraid or shame of it. Because I never stop studying xxx until I got a good enough grade.
If you don't bother it, please check my errors in my essay.
My name is HyunJeong Yi, and I was born in February, 1986, Seoul. There are four of us in my family, my father, my mother, my twin brother and me. The daughter of an army officer, I had a somewhat nomadic childhood. With my bright and exuberant personality and good personal relationships, I adjusted and adapted very easily to new school and various environment.
I relish to get a thrill out of really testing situations. One of my hobbies is taking xxx test irregularly. Even there's no need to take a high score in exam, I just took it for fun which got a thrill to take a good grade after studying hard. Five years ago, I just took xxx in Vancouver, Canada, and got quite high score, 96. When I was a senior in my university, I wanted to challege the xxx,another test of xxx, and got over 850 in xxx in 2009. Finally, I decided to take xxx just one month ago. Even though my grade for the xxx was not so good, I am not afraid or shame of it. Because I never stop studying xxx until I got a good enough grade.
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Hi HyunJeong Yi, I corrected some mistakes in your essay and also rewrote some parts to make it sound clearer, as seen below: My name is HyunJeong Yi, and I was born in February, 1986, in Seoul, South Korea. There are four of us in my family; my father, my mother, my twin brother, and me. As the daughter of an army officer, I had a somewhat nomadic childhood.
- Hi HyunJeong Yi, I corrected some mistakes in your essay and also rewrote some parts to make it sound clearer, as seen below: My name is HyunJeong Yi, and I was born in February, 1986, in Seoul, South Korea.
- There are four of us in my family; my father, my mother, my twin brother, and me.
- As the daughter of an army officer, I had a somewhat nomadic childhood.
- With my bright, exuberant personality and good personal relationships skills, I adjusted and adapted very easily to new schools and various environments.
- I relish the thrill that comes with challenging situations.
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Hi HyunJeong Yi,
I corrected some mistakes in your essay and also rewrote some parts to make it sound clearer, as seen below:
My name is HyunJeong Yi, and I was born in February, 1986, in Seoul, South Korea. There are four of us in my family; my father, my mother, my twin brother, and me. As the daughter of an army officer, I had a somewhat nomadic childhood. With my bright, exub
I corrected some mistakes in your essay and also rewrote some parts to make it sound clearer, as seen below:
My name is HyunJeong Yi, and I was born in February, 1986, in Seoul, South Korea. There are four of us in my family; my father, my mother, my twin brother, and me. As the daughter of an army officer, I had a somewhat nomadic childhood. With my bright, exub
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