Please proofread: 44 words.

Question

Hi all,I'm a translator for mobile applications such as those of iPhone and have a paragraph that I'd like to add on my business website, will you please make sure if it is making sense?"No one would disagree that the Japanese are significant buyers of new technology. According to AdMob, while the portion remains relatively small, Japan has already taken the 2nd place for the iPad unique users in the world after its release on May 28, 2010. "Thanks in advance,M

Hmea1 · Accepted Answer

No one would disagree that the Japanese are significant buyers of new technology. According to AdMob, while the portion remains relatively small, Japan has already taken 2nd place for unique users of the iPad in the world after its release on May 28, 2010.

I am not sure what you meant by "iPad unique users."

Clive · Answer

Hi,

Here are a few edits and comments.

"No one would disagree that the Japanese are significant buyers of new technology. According to AdMob, while the portion what portion? remains relatively small, Japan has already taken ~~the~~ 2nd place for the iPad unique users in the world after the Ipad's release on May 28, 2010. "

What's an iPad unique user?

'Taken 2nd. place' makes it sound like Japan has won second place in a competition. I suggest something like 'Japan has already become the country with the second highest number of . . . . . '

Try again, if you wish to.

Clive

Mitsuo23 · Answer

Hi,

I stolen the expression "iPad unique users" from a chat, I think it works only if the chart is also attached, which I will.

Thanks always,
M

Please proofread: 44 words.

Top answer

Get the Weekly English Kit 📬

Related Questions