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I went on four day cruise this week and had a great time but one thing I realized while I was on the ship is that time waits for nobody and that the present time is the right time. As the cruise moves at its snails pace across the pacific, I’m anxiously waiting to disembark so that I can start on my next project. Don’t get me wrong the cruise was a worthwhile trip but it’s better suited for couples or people who are retired or over 60yo.
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It makes sense, but I'd recommend adding more commas (shown below). I went on four day cruise this week and had a great time, but one thing I realized while I was on the ship is that time waits for nobody, and that the present time is the right time. As the cruise moves at its snails pace across the pacific, I’m anxiously waiting to disembark so that I can start on my next project.
- It makes sense, but I'd recommend adding more commas (shown below).
- I went on four day cruise this week and had a great time, but one thing I realized while I was on the ship is that time waits for nobody, and that the present time is the right time.
- As the cruise moves at its snails pace across the pacific, I’m anxiously waiting to disembark so that I can start on my next project.
- Don’t get me wrong, the cruise was a worthwhile trip, but it’s better suited for couples or people who are retired or over 60yo.
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It makes sense, but I'd recommend adding more commas (shown below).
I went on four day cruise this week and had a great time, but one thing I realized while I was on the ship is that time waits for nobody, and that the present time is the right time. As the cruise moves at its snails pace across the pacific, I’m anxiously waiting to disembark so that I can start on my next project. Do
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