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Some people think students should study the science of food and how to prepare it. Others think that school time should be used in learning important subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

Nowadays, in spite of some people believing the science of food and preparation is essential for children, others think that children should use time in school to learn important subjects. In my view, I strongly agree that food science and how to prepare it is very crucial and helpful to children.

First of all, there are vast reasons why people suppose children need to learn about food and prepare for it. In my opinion, the root cause is to raise awareness on children about what they can or can not eat. Otherwise, they tend to eat any food they like regardless of value and they will overlook the effect of unhealthy food like junk food, fast food on their health. In addition sugary food attracts the attention of children very much so if children do not know about the drawbacks of these kinds of food, they will eat a lot and can’t stop. After a prolonged period of eating unhealthy food, children are more likely to get diseases than others who don’t eat these. Therefore, teaching children about food science and how to prepare it will prevent some health problems among children due to snacks.

On the other hand, some people think school time should be spent on learning important subjects instead of studying unrelated things. It is indisputable that some subjects taught in the school play a key role to the mental development of children and these make them more intelligent. Moreover, the education system in which subjects are designed and arranged reasonably in order to help students become well-rounded and confident.

In conclusion, despite the advantages of school’s important subjects, I fully agree that children should be educated about food science and preparation. It is very helpful for children and diseases caused by unhealthy food will be avoided.