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01i00Can someone please please go through the essay and make sure that sentence structure, flow, punctuation, mood, and tense are presented in a manner that makes sense, while looking out for inconsistencies???02i02br
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01b00Why I want to pursue B.S. in Telecommunication.02b02br
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01b00I am lucky to have been born02b00 with a technical mind. I have always taken interest in technologies and mechanical sciences. I still remember once my father bought a rounded rectangular device with an antenna fixed on the top, and began talking on it. It relates to the days when the mobile phone was first introduced. At that time, I would be in grade 4 or 5. I wondered how one could speak with another through such a small device. It was like a toy - 00 00a plaything. I broke it in order to know what was inside it that could enable one to talk to another so easily. I couldn’t find anything but some chips, cards, a board and a battery. Of course, my father rebuked me a lot 01b00for it was too expensive, but that02b00 didn’t put an end to my curiosity. However, 01b00it was not the only technology that intrigued me02b00, other miracles of science like how the radio works and the internet astonished me too.00 00As I grew older, my curiosity got bigger.02br
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00I have been interested in telecommunication for some years, in fact since school. I’ve narrowed my goal to become a telecommunication designer and planner. I would like to do something in this field that can help00 00facilitate the ongoing global dialogue by making hardware or software for phone, satellite or other communications networks. Through my academic experience and interest, I became more aware of subfields of telecommunication. Specifically, I would like to be a telecommunication engineer in an international organization. I would like to focus on optical communication, systems designing and security. To reach my professional goals, I know I will have to work very hard to achieve 01b00my objectives02b00 of gaining the knowledge and the engineering skills necessary to be highly sought-after in, and to keep pace with, the rapidly advancing Telecommunications industry,00 00and to improve my ability to think more strategically and technically. 02br
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00In conclusion, the reasons why I want to pursue my career in telecommunication are its fascination and my exuberance. And I know that pursuing a B.S.00 00in telecommunication will start me on my way toward a bright career.0-