Please, need opinion about admission autobiography. Thanks.

Hello!


Can somebody please give me an opinion about my admission autobiography? It suppose to be up to 1000 words. Does is sound good and what can I do to make it sound better and stronger? I will really appreciate any comment!




Thank you so much!

My name is ***, I am graduating student at final year of *** University. I was born in ***, the capital of *** on September 07^th, 1981 and I still live here. I grew up in a happy family, where we spent a lots of quality time together, traveling, learning, playing, having a fun. Beside my parents I have an older sister, who lives in ***. My parents are planning to move to *** as well.

I finished primary and secondary school in ***. In primary school I had the highest grades and therefore received special recognition from the school. That helped me enroll one of the best high schools in *** an elite high school of general orientation. It offered a balanced high-level education in both social studies and sciences. I graduated in the top 5% of my class in June 2000. Education that I got in high school was extremely useful because it equipped me with wide circle of knowledge and made me a serious candidate for application to any university.

At the moment, I am in the process of completing the final year of the BSc program in ***. This program lasts for five years (ten semesters).

During first two years I received a very good theoretical knowledge from all fields of general science including: three semesters of Mathematics (including probability), General, Analytical, Organic and Physical Chemistry (two semesters each), Physics, Computer Programming, etc. Some of the mandatory courses at the final years such as: Biochemistry, Chemistry of Natural Organic Compounds, Biochemical Engineering, Enzymology, Industrial Microbiology and Genetics offered theoretical and laboratory skills in fields of cell function and metabolism, biological processes, transmission of information in cells, characteristics and types of animal and plant cells, genetic control, gene therapy, experimental techniques used in genetic and metabolic engineering of cells.

This helped me realize what possibilities and benefits we could have using genetic manipulation and how huge impact on the living world does the genetics have. Next step was to learn more about basic human genetics because I was highly motivated to make my engineering skills more applicable in genetic field. As I did not have elective courses in basic genetics at my Faculty, I applied to take a course in Biology with Human Genetics at *** Faculty . I was accepted to attend lectures, laboratory work as well as seminars in Biology with Human Genetics, which I found extremely useful. Moreover, I was so fascinated with this genetic course, that it definitely determined my ambition towards pursuing master degree in this field.

During my studies I had a chance to travel a lot. I visited almost all European countries, Argentina, South Africa, USA, and Canada. Traveling is one of my passions because it gives me the opportunity to discover and learn a lot about different countries, their culture, customs, history and art. Even in a high school I was aware of importance of being fluent in other languages. Therefore, I spent five weeks in London improving my English in the summer of 1997. I also visited Russia for three weeks, in the summer of 2000, where I got familiar with Russian culture and language.

In the year of 2001, I was one of the twenty students selected to represent my country at the student conference “New Technologies and Resources” in Germany. Apart from having a chance to work together with students from all over the world that I found very inspiring, my participation in this international student conference allowed me to learn about the latest technology researches.

I am also member of several students and non-government organizations like BEST - Board of European Students of Technology and AEGAEE - one of the largest European student organizations with the aim to promote ideas of the united Europe. Since 2000 when I have been elected by majority of student votes to be an active member of the Student Union Board at my Faculty. As I am very devoted to current students issues, I am active in journal club writing and editing for my Faculty’s newspapers.

One of my passions is the art, especially theatre. As a member of Theatre fun club, I am using every opportunity to see a good theatre show. Last year I was voluntarily involved as a leader of extras in a project of shouting movie named “Devil’s warrior”, which was presented with a big success. This experience enabled me to develop my organizing and leadership skills.

All these activities made possible for me to have a large number of national and international friends. I am very friendly and open "people person", with good communication skills, who mingles well with others and makes friendships easily. My friends know me as a cheerful and enthusiastic person who is enjoying learning new things and helping others.

I am thrilled by the opportunity to join a group of professionals where I will be able to apply my skills, talents, and enthusiasm. I am convinced that my qualities will be a valuable asset for your program. I am aware of the pressure and challenges that I will be facing during studies in such a distinguished program as yours. However, I do want to take the challenge seriously and hope that you will accept my application. The acceptance in *** College will make me a very proud student and I will do my best to make a positive contribution to the diversity and competitiveness of your college.

Thank you very much for your time and for considering my application. I am looking forward to your reply.

Sincerely yours,