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Rimel Posted 18 years ago
Letter Writing

Please Mister Micawber - Can you help me to correct my cover letter

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00 As I saw you were a forum guru, kindly responding to some request here, I personnally ask for your help. I actually need some part of my cover letter to be corrected as I am looking for a new job. I would really appreciate if you could help me.02br
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01b00"I have a comprehensive professional experience, during which I have had exposure to various financial products / investment strategies as an asset manager or a risk controller. I have developed an extensive knowledge of financial markets and most asset classes. Specialized in equity markets and arbitrages, I have also acquired strong technical skills in different fields such as funds allocation and derivatives. The position you want to fulfil is for me a unique occasion to synthesize my previous experience and take part in an ambitious global and large-scale project. I am an analytical, proactive and committed team player who can work autonomously.02b02br
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01b00I am confident my qualification will be of interest to you and I am eager to take part in ABC expansion. I would be delighted to attend for an interview and look forward to hearing from you soon."02b0-
  

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02br 01i 00I have underlined some problem areas:02i 02br 02br 00I have 01del 00a02del 00 comprehensive professional experience, during which I have had exposure to various financial products01u 00 /02u 00 investment strategies as an asset manager or a risk controller. I have developed an extensive knowledge of financial markets and most asset classes. Specializ01u 00ed02u 00 in equity markets and arbitrages, I have also acquired strong technical skills in different fields such as funds allocation and derivatives.

— Mister Micawber

  • 02br 01i 00I have underlined some problem areas:02i 02br 02br 00I have 01del 00a02del 00 comprehensive professional experience, during which I have had exposure to various financial products01u 00 /02u 00 investment strategies as an asset manager or a risk controller.
  • I have developed an extensive knowledge of financial markets and most asset classes.
  • Specializ01u 00ed02u 00 in equity markets and arbitrages, I have also acquired strong technical skills in different fields such as funds allocation and derivatives.
  • The position you want to 01u 00fulfil02u 00 is for me a unique 01u 00occasion02u 00 to synthesize my previous experience and take part in an ambitious 01u 00global and large-scale02u 00 project.
  • 02br 02br 00I am confident my qualification will be of interest to you and I am eager to take part in ABC expansion.
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0Many thanks for your kind help Mister Micawber.0-
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