Please make my sentences be smoother

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Dear teachers. I've kept a silent reader for a long time, now I think that it's time for me to write something for you to correct my mistakes. Because I think that what if I don't express what I'm about to write, I'll never be progressive. Now that I get all of my courage to compose my first essay. Please make my sentences be smoother in this paragraph bellow and what I've written above. Thanks in advance.
DIFFICULTIES OF LAST YEAR STUDENT
It's the title of my essay. Is that OK? If it doesn't, please give me another idea since I don't have a lot of experiences. If it's ok, I'll continue my work.

Mister Micawber · Accepted Answer

The Difficulties of Students / a Student Last Year

Ocsenttdd · Answer

The difficulties of student last year
It's about 3 years I've been learning in my uninersity. My major is finance. Now, it's time for all of us have to join an internship to finish the course.
Not like what I learn before, this semester I needn't go to school and stay at class to approach subjects. My teachers gave me some of joint stock companies' name, and my task was applying for them with an CV, then waiting for their feedback. Three weeks later, there were 4 companies acccept my CV and call me for their test exam. I failed to get enough scores in two companies and get through in the others, then I had to be interviewed and luckyly I passed too. At last I chose a smaller company for my intership because my teacher said that there are a lots of tasks when you work in.
It's a bit tired for me with a month in finding the place to intern. That's not all, I'm very busy with some works recieve from my company. And I have to complete my intern report for teacher in 2 months. In this period of these, I also have to prepare for my biggest examination that is graduation. After that I wish to work in a good company, and it usually require english certification. Now that I want to improve my writting by this forum. Hope that you'll help me. Thanks.

Mister Micawber · Answer

I have underlined some problems. Please try to fix all of them and post your revision here:

The difficulties of student last year

It's about 3 years I've been learning in my uninersity. My major is finance. Now, it's time for all of us have to join an internship to finish the course.

Not like what I learn before, this semester I needn't go to school and stay at class to approach subjects. My teachers gave me some of joint stock companies' name, and my task was applying for them with an CV, then waiting for their feedback. Three weeks later, there were 4 companies acccept my CV and call me for their test exam. I failed to get enough scores in two companies and get through in the others, then I had to be interviewed and luckyly I passed too. At last I chose a smaller company for my intership because my teacher said that there are a lots of tasks when you work in.
It's a bit tired for me with a month in finding the place to intern. That's not all, I'm very busy with some works recieve from my company. And I have to complete my intern report for teacher in 2 months. In this period of these, I also have to prepare for my biggest examination that is graduation. After that I wish to work in a good company, and it usually require english certification. Now that I want to improve my writting by this forum. Hope that you'll help me. Thanks.

Ocsenttdd · Answer

Thanks for your helping. I've just replace my mistakes, please check for my essay again.

The difficulties of a student last year.
There are about 3 years I've learnt in my university. My major is finance. Now, there is time for all of us must to experience an internship to finish the course.
Not like what I learnt before, this semester I mustn't go to school and stay in class to learn subjects. My teachers gave me some joint stock companies, and my task was applying to them with a CV, then waiting for their feedback. Three weeks later, there were four companies acccepting my CV and ask me for their test exam. I failed to get enough marks in two companies and got through in the others then I had to be interviewed and fortunately I passed them too. At last I chose a smaller company for my internship because my teacher said that there were a lots of tasks when you work at.
There is a bit tired for me in a month in finding a place to intern. In addition, I'm very busy with some works which were recieved from my company and I have to complete my intern report for a teacher in two months. In this period, I also have to prepare for my biggest examination, that is graduation. After that, I wish to work in a good company, and it usually requires an english certification. So that I want to improve my writting skill in this forum. Hope that you'll help me. Thanks.

Mister Micawber · Answer

The Difficulties of a Student Last Year

This is my third year of university. My major is finance. This year we must experience an internship to finish the course.

Unlike before, this semester I will not go to university classes. My teachers gave me the names of some joint stock companies, and my task was to apply to them with my CV, then wait for their response. Three weeks later, four companies had acknowledged my CV and asked me to take their examination. I failed to get high enough marks on two of them, but I passed the others. Then I was interviewed, and fortunately I passed those too. At last I chose a smaller company for my internship because my teacher said that there were a lot of different tasks when you work at a small one.

This month was a bit tiring for me in finding a place to intern. In addition, I have been very busy with some work which I was assigned by my company, and I also have to complete my intern report for my teacher in two months. At the same time, I also have to prepare for my biggest examination, the one for graduation. After that, I wish to work in a good company, which usually requires English certification, so I want to improve my writing skill in this forum. I hope that you'll help me. Thanks.

Ocsenttdd · Answer

Thank you very much, Mister Micawber. Next time, I'll try my best to avoid mistakes.

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