Please look at the sentences below and advise me if they are worded correctly.

My name is John. I am working abroad and my family recently relocated to this city because of my wife's job issues. At that time of relocation, we approached your school for admission for my children but we were informed that admission was closed for year 2018-19 and asked us to contact the school in November. My children, Amy and Andre who are studying in Grade I. We want to give them every opportunity in life to succeed and reach their full potential. We are confident that by attending your school, they will become better prepared to face life's challenges and to achieve their dreams.

Therefore, I kindly request that you to provide admissions for my children this year or next 2019-20 academic year...