Please Kindly Review My IELTS Task 2 Essay!

Topic: Doctors, nurses and teachers make a great contribution to society and should be paid more than entertainment and sports celebrities. Do you agree or disagree?

There are some opinions that doctors, nurses and teachers should be paid more than athletes and entertainers because they contribute much to society. To my way of thinking, I completely agree with these opinions.

Doctors and nurses work and do not care about time. Doctors need to work for long hours from early morning and late at night, whereas nurses have to work on shifts to ensure all patients are cared for. They sacrifice their time to try their best to help and save patients even because having surgery, they do not eat or drink anything on 24 hours to use the time for saving patients. Therefore doctors and nurses often have stomachaches. Furthermore, working with other people's lives makes them very pressured and stressful, they will be shocked if their patients died. We know that studying about pharmacy is very expensive, and students must spend from 6 to 8 years on studying.

In the same manner, teachers are responsible for educating and nurturing a new generation. That responsibility by itself is undeniable hard and demanding. Everyone knows that children are the future of their countries so children should be taught and encouraged to express themselves in the right way. And people do these are teachers who have huge pressure on their shoulders. Teachers educate children not only theories of subjects but also experiences of life. For example, I am extremely admirable a male teacher who taught me in grade fourth. He helps me feel confident about myself because I used to be shy when I talk before a crowded, and now I am very confident to express myself or give my lectures.

In conclusion, professional workers should be awarded a high salary compared to athletes and entertainers because they have a great contribution to society.