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Some people say that children should go to school as soon as possible, while others believe that children should go to school at least 7 years old. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

Many feel that children should start formal education as soon as possible, whereas others think that only when they turn seven, can children be allowed to go to school. From my perspective, whether they should attend school early or not, is depending on the development of each child.

First of all, it seems that children at ages that less than seven are in the stage that their personalities are vulnerable to external factors. By this I mean, if a child is raised in a positive home and neighborhood environment, they would form positive behaviors and thinking. Otherwise, they would be led astray by various social factors. And this might an explanation for why some people think that children should go to school as soon as possible. In their opinion, at schools, children are under the supervision of teachers and while studying in a formal academic environment, children are taught to be disciplined and independent. These merits can protect children from negative external factors from society.

On the other hand, people who believe children should only be permitted to attend school, when they turn seven might think that children who younger than seven are not mentally-prepared to change the environment that they are familiar with, thus, leading to various problems at schools. Recent research concluded that many children attending school early feel stressed, socially isolated or even mentally- disordered. These might be the factors that lead to the problems of students’ poor performances and bullying at schools.

My view is that children should only be allowed to start formal schooling, only if they are mentally ready. As well as this, educators should not restrict the age for starting formal schooling of children. This is because some children may develop faster and thereby are more mature than others.