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Thread:
You have a Facebook friend living in another country and s/he is curious to learn about a major news item in your country.
Write a letter to your Facebook friend. In your letter
describe a news story in your country
explain why people are interested in it
say how the story personally relates to you
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My Essay:
Dear Billy
I am writing to tell you about a social phenomenon on Youtube channel for several month from now. I will show to you how this channel be exciting to all subscribers and I hope you to be fantasticing and you give a conclusion in yourself after watching those videos.I have followed and watched a number of videos on Youtube, but the Channel named 'Ba Tan Vlog' has pay attention on me for a first time I known. She owned this channel only a week and has get million views and subscribers a day. She is that a great phenomenon not only Vietnam but also overseas, she is a hilarious with every scenes. Addition, she got a record on the world about the gigantic subscribers and followers.
I know you are too busy with your job and have no time for entertainment. You are one of busy people, need a thing to enjoy after a long day. Research group of this things, as 'Ba Tan Vlog' channel has been coming to entertaining is the main reason, thus, this channel give you about how to cook a meal with the simplest recipe.
Videos have been making and uploading every single day. I extremely coming day by day since I wanted to enjoy the rest of
the day with smiles. Some days, although I have a bad day after a long day, I want to lie down on couch and watch every single videos from hers.
I am a bad at in cook a daily meals, while I watching her videos, I realized that she so quick-hands and skillful and after her videos, I can get some conclusion for myself, I would like to have some great personalities from her.I would you enjoy and some videos from her make you have good mood after working for a long day.
Sincerely,
Issac
Top answer
You did not follow the instructions. A youtube channel or video is not a local news story. Please pick an item that is an election, a local festival, a discovery, a sports competition or some other event in your country.
- You did not follow the instructions.
- A youtube channel or video is not a local news story.
- Please pick an item that is an election, a local festival, a discovery, a sports competition or some other event in your country.
- Most of your writing is not good, natural English.
- You make many mistakes in singular/plural forms, verb forms, vocabulary and sentence structure.
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You did not follow the instructions.
A youtube channel or video is not a local news story.
Please pick an item that is an election, a local festival, a discovery, a sports competition or some other event in your country.
Most of your writing is not good, natural English. You make many mistakes in singular/plural forms, verb forms, vocabulary and sentence structure.
You
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