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Anonymous Posted 12 years ago
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Dear Ms Cho,
Regarding the Invoice No.12, the vessel have change ETA date from Mar.14th to 20th. Therefore, we have 3 shipments that the vessel will arrive on Mar.20th ; Invoice No.12 (10 containers), 13 (6 containers) and 14 (2 containers). However, we can not move all containers from container yard and unload them within one week. Could you please request extra demurrage free time from your line? If we have more time, the line won't charges us.
Regarding the Invoice No.12, the vessel have change ETA date from Mar.14th to 20th. Therefore, we have 3 shipments that the vessel will arrive on Mar.20th ; Invoice No.12 (10 containers), 13 (6 containers) and 14 (2 containers). However, we can not move all containers from container yard and unload them within one week. Could you please request extra demurrage free time from your line? If we have more time, the line won't charges us.
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Hi, From reading your post, this is my interpretation. For business correspondence, especially involving multiple items, I recommend using bullet style to make the items more visual. You only mentioned change for # 12 but I interpreted from the context that invoice # 13 and 14.
- Hi, From reading your post, this is my interpretation.
- For business correspondence, especially involving multiple items, I recommend using bullet style to make the items more visual.
- You only mentioned change for # 12 but I interpreted from the context that invoice # 13 and 14.
- were also changed.
- 14th to Mar.
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Hi,
From reading your post, this is my interpretation.
For business correspondence, especially involving multiple items, I recommend using bullet style to make the items more visual. You only mentioned change for # 12 but I interpreted from the context that invoice # 13 and 14. were also changed. Assuming they are arriving at the same time, this is how I would do it:
Dear Ms Ch
From reading your post, this is my interpretation.
For business correspondence, especially involving multiple items, I recommend using bullet style to make the items more visual. You only mentioned change for # 12 but I interpreted from the context that invoice # 13 and 14. were also changed. Assuming they are arriving at the same time, this is how I would do it:
Dear Ms Ch
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