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Dear Sir and Madam:
I'm fourth year Architecture Student of Tishreen University of Syria. I would like to apply for undergraduate program scholarship of Cambridge University of Architecture Department for finishing my study there and graduate, with this step i believe only Cambridge will get me to a high level of knowledge and experience and will help me to give and show more abilities in developing my architectural skills.

I've always had passion in painting, designing and construction since childhood. I also earnestly yearn to create beautiful things on my own and architecture can satisfy my imagination in space, materials, and color. My born interest in this sector is also because of my Dad, who is structural engineer, influencing me gradually and unconsciously since I was a kid and giving me perceptual knowledge in the field. After my studying years in the Department of Architecture, what really makes me choose architecture is its intrinsic appeal, which is just like the maxim written inside the building of the Department of Architecture: “Architecture is the combination of art and technology.”

Perhaps when a person is engaged in what his keen interest blossoms, he will never feel tired, instead he would feel motivated and have an enriching experience. four years' academic study in the School of Architecture of Tishreen University transformed my instinctive excitement and imagination about architecture into systematic knowledge and comprehensive understanding. This transformation, first of all, lies in my skills in the fine arts. Differing from my previous mere interest in fine arts and street arts, the study of architecture makes me begin to ponder on how to draw using aesthetic elements from fine arts such as color, lighting and composition to apply to architecture.

As long as Arts meant to be a big part of me in my life since i was a kid, i grew up as a gifted talented person between colors, lines and imagination.
Through my life i used to develop my artistic skills by myself with no one help.
At age 15 was my start in Graffiti and Street Art, i learned how to use spray paint cans, and moved my art works from papers to walls, and canvases. Along the years of experience and practice i became a professional Artist who have a strong hand in drawing, painting and creating the perfect lines, and whose imagination is ready for designing and details.
When i entered the college I used my artistic skills into Architecture, the strong hand for sketching and designing, and the imagination for planning.
I didn't get enough, so besides to the college courses i’ve improved my abilities in computer architectural programs like AutoCad, 3D Max, and photoshop.

Because of my childhood architectural background, coupled with my passion in Arts and being a famous artists in my area, I gained excellent achievements in practical life, I did a lot of art, designing, and decorating projects. many people and companies asked me to paint for them big murals and decorating their areas.
In 2013 i designed 2 villas around my city, in 2014 i've involved in planning and designing the Orange mall in my city . beside my big art murals that i've did all around my country, and having my own exhibitions. These experiences gave me insights into the relationship between a building's space and its functionality, as well as architectural design's feasibility.

Meanwhile, I learned new ideas in architecture from different views, and especially saw a lot of design drawings of overseas architectural masters. All these experiences have a great impact on me, sparking my intention of studying abroad to learn more in-depth contemporary international architectural conceptions. I especially aspire to get to know in more detail modern western architectural history in the hopes of forming my own architectural conceptions.
Thank you very much for considering my application. I look forward to your positive response.