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The graph shows the information about the drinking behavior in US dependent on age.It is clear that age has a huge influence on drinking habit which changes significantly.

As can be seen from the graph, the highest proportion of people who never drink was in the 16-24 group. The proportion tended to decreased by age from 62% of 16-24 group to 45% of 65-74 group. By contrast, the proportion of people who used to drink increased considerably by age, only 5% of total in 25-34 group but there was 40% of 65-74 group.

The proportion of light drinker tended to be the young people, accounted for 25% people in total of 24-35 group. From that point onwards, this figure had decreased remarkably to 6% of 65-74 group. The people in middle age (35 to 54) tended to be the heaviest drinker,approximately 13 in total of 35-44 group and declined slightly to 5% in total of 65-74 group.

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The graph (what kind of graph?) shows ~~the~~ information about (be more specific) the drinking behavior in the US ~~dependent on~~ by age.~~It is clear that age has a huge influence on drinking habit which changes significantly.~~

~~As can be seen from the graph,~~

(In Task 1, the instructions are to describe the figure for a university professor. Do not write opinions or draw conclusions. "It is clear" is your opinion. "Age has a huge influence" is a conclusion. Also "It is seen from the graph" is completely unnecessary. It gives no information about the graph itself.

Here is a model first paragraph. Note that it takes several sentences to fully describe the diagram:

The bar graph shows adult drinking behavior by age in the US. Specifically it divides the population into groups characterized by the amount of alcoholic drinks they consume: non-drinkers, light drinkers, and heavy drinkers. The non-drinking group is further divided into those who never drank, and those who used to drink, but no longer do so (ex-drinkers). One stacked bar is plotted for each 10-year age interval. There are six age groups beginning with ages 16-24 and ending with the oldest group, ages 65-74.

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The highest proportion of people who never drink was in the 16-24 group. The proportion ~~tended to~~ decreased ("tend to" is more opinion. The past "decreased" tells actually what is on the chart.) by age from 62% of 16-24 group to 45% of 65-74 group. By contrast, the proportion of people who used to drink increased considerably by age, only 5% of total in 25-34 group but ~~there was~~ 40% of 65-74 group.

The proportion of light drinker ~~tended to be~~ was highest in the young people, accounted for 25% people in ~~total of~~ the 24-35 group. From that point onwards, this ~~figure~~ ~~had~~ decreased by nearly 75% ~~remarkably~~ (use mathematical numbers rather than descriptive words.) to 6% of the 65-74 group. The people in middle age (35 to 54) ~~tended to be~~ the heaviest drinker,approximately 13 in ~~total of~~ the 35-44 group and ~~declined~~ slightly less to 5% in ~~total of~~ the 65-74 group.

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