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I am very happy and thankful for that

Question: Describe a situation when you celebrate your achievement ?

Answer: Well, I ‘m going to tell you about the time when I celebrated with my friend, who I work with. He is not only my cousin but also a peer who I often spend time hanging out with. If my memory serves me right that was on September 9, 2019, a very special and memorable day, I received some bounties from my boss for having accomplished the task efficiently. So I took a day off from work to hang out with my friends. I invited him to attend a crowded music concert .in the city center. Specifically, you know, We took the bus and kept gossiping until we entered the show. First of all, I woke up very early although I had stayed up late the previous night. I was very sleepy but I tried to stay awake for fear of missing out. Well, he is often late for appointments and in that day, after coming late, he apologized me right away. Actually, it made me feel a bit down in the dump. I still lied that it was OK and I was willing to forgive him but honestly , I was really sick and tired of having waited for so long. We wore the same vest at the concert. After that, we went home and the two of us prepared a lavish meal. In the end, we played table tennis and I won against him, Well, in fact, he was the one who taught me to play table tennis. To be honest, It was a difficult challenge that I thought I couldn't beat off
At the end of the day, both of us played almost all night long, winning him that day plus celebrating my company's accomplishments made me feel so exciting that I couldn't get myself to sleep , that night I was totally fatigued but it was extremely fun, and was a ripple of excitement feelings that I will never dismiss from my mind.