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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. The pie charts compare six places in the earth in term of different ways to use water. Overall, spending water for agriculture accounts for the largest proportion of almost areas. However, North America and Europe prefer to employ water for industrial.Regarding to North America and Europe, most water consumption was used for industrial which comprise a haft, 48% and 53% respectively. In term of agricultural use, the figure for the North America is slightly more than that of the Europe, which is about 7% higher. The percentage of spending water for domestic is lowest in both nations, just nearly 14% of total.Most water in the other regions is for agriculture, with the highest figure belonging to Central Asia, at 88%. Spending water for domestic is quite larger than industrial in three nations (except South East Asia), with accounting for around 7% to 19%. In contrast, South East Asia uses more water for industrial, which the figure for domestic was equal 7% with Central Asia.

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The pie charts compare six places (wrong word. A place is a particular location.) in (wrong word. ) the earth in term (wrong form) . of different ways to use water.

Your paragraph is not complete. What are the different ways to use water? How many ways are there? What are the areas? How do these areas relate to the pie charts? Write all of this in paragraph 1.

~~Overall, spending water for agriculture accounts for the largest proportion of almost areas. However, North America and Europe prefer to employ water for industrial.~~

Here is a good outline for all Task 1 essays:

Paragraph 1: Describe all aspects of the figure (map, table, chart or graph.) Do not mention any data values.

Tell the reader how many figures, what kind of figures, the subject matter, the geographical location, time period, units of measure, and the number and names of any categories.

Write 1-3 sentences.

Paragraph 2: Describe 2-3 significant observations in the data.

Write 1-3 sentences.

Paragraph 3: Describe some interesting details. Give data values and calculations you have made based on those values. Compare categories, time periods or anything else that stands out.

Write enough to make the minimum word count.

Regarding to (wrong phrase. ) North America and Europe, most water consumption was used for industrial (wrong from. Industrial is an adjective. You need a noun. . ) which comprise a haft, (wrong word. ) 48% and 53% respectively. In term of agricultural use, the figure (wrong word. ) for the North America is slightly more than that of ~~the~~ Europe, which is about 7% higher. The percentage of spending (wrong word. We spend time or money. We do not spend water. )water for domestic (wrong from. Domestic is an adjective. You need a noun. . ) is lowest in both nations, just nearly 14% of the total.

Most water in the other regions is for agriculture, with the highest figure (wrong word. ) belonging to Central Asia, at 88%. Spending water for domestic is quite larger than industrial in three nations (wrong word. Is Europe a nation? Who is the leader? ) (except South East Asia), with accounting for around 7% to 19%. In contrast, South East Asia uses more water for industrial, which the figure for domestic was equal 7% with Central Asia.

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