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Zcarfaz Posted 15 years ago
Grammar
Please help with grammer
I need to know if I have use "which" in the correct place
my sentence is
Even though Benjamin Franklin has used more logos to prove his theory of arriving at perfection with brief explanations, he has totally ignored the using of pathos and he has not considered about a diverse audience when using the ethos which has made his theory less convincing to his audience.
"Which" in the green part, does it describes the both pathos and ethos or just ethos?
How can I improve this sentence? If I put a comma next to ethos, would that work?
(This is a thesis statement of my essay)
my sentence is
Even though Benjamin Franklin has used more logos to prove his theory of arriving at perfection with brief explanations, he has totally ignored the using of pathos and he has not considered about a diverse audience when using the ethos which has made his theory less convincing to his audience.
"Which" in the green part, does it describes the both pathos and ethos or just ethos?
How can I improve this sentence? If I put a comma next to ethos, would that work?
(This is a thesis statement of my essay)
Top answer
zcarfaz Even though Benjamin Franklin has used more logos to prove his theory of arriving at perfection with brief explanations, he has totally ignored the using of pathos and he has not considered about a diverse audience when using the ethos which has made his theory less convincing to his audience. Which - refers to his combined act of ignoring and not considering. I will refrain from offering suggestion for improvement.
- zcarfaz Even though Benjamin Franklin has used more logos to prove his theory of arriving at perfection with brief explanations, he has totally ignored the using of pathos and he has not considered about a diverse audience when using the ethos which has made his theory less convincing to his audience.
- Which - refers to his combined act of ignoring and not considering.
- I will refrain from offering suggestion for improvement.
- But my opinion toward the passage is that the sentences are constructed awkwardly and the use of present perfect seemed odd aince Benjamin Franklin has been dead long ago.
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zcarfazEven though Benjamin Franklin has used more logos to prove his theory of arriving at perfection with brief explanations, he has totally ignored the using of pathos and he has not considered about a diverse audience when using the ethos which has made his theo
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Hello, zcarfaz - and welcome to English Forums.
I presume that 'Benjamin Franklin' is not the famous 18th century American but a living person with the same name. I am not familiar with your topic. The word 'logos' here does not seem to have its usual meaning.
Even though Benjamin Franklin has used more logos to prove his theory of arriving at perfection with brie
I presume that 'Benjamin Franklin' is not the famous 18th century American but a living person with the same name. I am not familiar with your topic. The word 'logos' here does not seem to have its usual meaning.
Even though Benjamin Franklin has used more logos to prove his theory of arriving at perfection with brie
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