Please help with Grammar questions

Hello, I have multiple questions that i am concerned about.

1) mellifluous song she has sung him.

Q. is it wrong to says "she has sung him." - im trying to say "she has sung for him," but because it is poetry im trying to keep the beat going.

2) we traversed to the realm bellow
To continue our journey and thereof!

Q. can you use "thereof" in this manner?

3) It is said that quotations always go after of the punctuations.
Example: It gave their world a worthy "key."

Q. here im trying to use quotes to change or suggest that the word has a different, non literal meaning. Does that mean that the quotes would still be on the outside of the punctuations in all of these examples:
a. It gave their world a worthy "key;" That tool was used to change their world for the better.
b. It gave their world a worthy "key," which was used to change their world for the better.
c. It gave their world a worthy "key." That tool was used to change their world for the better.

or is this the correct way?

a. It gave their world a worthy "key"; That tool was used to change their world for the better.
a. It gave their world a worthy "key", That tool was used to change their world for the better.
a. It gave their world a worthy "key". That tool was used to change their world for the better.

4) While gliding slowly there amiss, she flew with ease around the clouds.

Q. can you use "amiss" in this manner?

5)
a. As their vessel begins encroaching upon the river's fence (forged out of intertwined trees), they near it, yet it doesn’t open.
b. As their vessel begins encroaching toward the river's fence (forged out of intertwined trees), they near it, yet it doesn’t open.

Which of these sentences is the correct way of phrasing it? Im trying to say that the vessel is coming closer to the fence in an imposing manner.

6) Not man, nor serpent, nor a beast!

I have two questions regarding this sentence.

Q. is the use of nor correct or should i use “or” for both serpent and beast?
Q. is the use of commas correct or are they unnecessary?

7) To continue their silent interaction, he broke silence anon.

Q. Can you use the word anon in this manner, despite the fact that it is archaic?

Im trying to say he broke silence at once or soon.

8) Not one's now able to get over this fact.

If im trying to say "not one is now able," can i still use "one's"?

9) Defiant, cunning birds there flurry,

Q. can I use flurry? Or scurry? Im trying to use flurry as a verb to mean:
Flurry (adj) - to move in an exciting and agitated manner
scurry (adj) - to move about or proceed hurriedly

10) Aloft the molds, the leader was stationed and controlled the machinery.

Can the word "aloft" mean "above"? im trying to say above the molds the leader was stationed, but trying to make it more aesthetic.

10) They walked toward the hailing sky

Q. can i use the word "hailing" as an adjective to mean that its hailing from the sky?

11)
we would:
We'd dance with her until our powers fail us.

We'd dance with her until our powers failed us.

we will:
We'll dance with her until our powers fail us.

We'll dance with her until our powers failed us.

Q. Which of these is correct?

12) Amidst the quiet, exhausted group, he sits and waits..

Q. "Amidst the" or "amidst of"?

13) Queens of England and of Russia, put forth a storm to silence their enemies.

Q. Should i use "queen" instead of "queens" if im referring to only two queens here (one for England and one for Russia)?

14) They reach Richard’s kingdom’s core.

Q. Is it ok to have two possessives that follow each other to mean that they now reached the kingdom's core which belongs to Richard?

15) The disastrous weather covered all the meadows with rain

Q. "all of the meadows" or "all the meadows"?

16) I fell into horror.

Q. "I fell in" or "I fell into"? Trying to mean that horror has taken over me emotionally.

17) He is a tyrant and a bounder of the free spirits.

Q. can you use the term bounder as someone who enslaves?

18) As beautiful visions their eyesight fill, they are in awe and can not utter words to describe the beauty before them.

Q. is this phrasing correct way of saying that beautiful visions have filled their eyesight before them?

19) As one the other swiftly copies, they traverse into the gloom of the deep.

Q. Can i use both "one the other" or "one another" to mean the same thing, if im trying to say that one copies the acts of the other?

20) You shouldn't ask, or inquire, or suggest.

Q. is the use of "or" or "nor" correct here?
Q. are commas needed?

21) A rain of bees comes falling down across the lavish forest.

Q. should i use "comes" or "come crashing down"? I was leaning toward "comes" because we are referring to "rain" (singular), but i am talking about bees, which is confusing me. Though rain here is a word that doesn’t have a literal meaning.