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Anonymous Posted 8 years ago
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Please help with cover letter

Hi,


Im preparing a cover letter and someone has suggested I use the following sentence. I'm not sure if it is correct. I appreciate the help!


The position represents a very exciting opportunity to me to enter an Admin Office role in Victoria Health utilising the skills I have gained working for various organisations over the last ten years.

  

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anonymous I'm not sure if it is correct. To me it seems stilted and verbose. You can consider this: I believe the position at the Admin Office in Victoria Health will give me an exciting opportunity to utilize the skills I have developed working for various organisations over the last ten years.

  • anonymous I'm not sure if it is correct.
  • To me it seems stilted and verbose.
  • You can consider this: I believe the position at the Admin Office in Victoria Health will give me an exciting opportunity to utilize the skills I have developed working for various organisations over the last ten years.
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anonymousI'm not sure if it is correct.

To me it seems stilted and verbose.

You can consider this:

I believe the position at the Admin Office in Victoria Health will give me an exciting opportunity to utilize the skills I have developed working for various organisations over the last ten years.

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