Please help we with some feedback on my letter of motivation

Deer Sirs,

With this letter I would like to show my interest for University of San Diego, especielly the department of Computer Science.

On the 15th of December 1987, I, Paw. --- . --- was born in Ikast, Denmark. I graduated from matemathic highschool at Ikast-Brande Gymnasium. At the age of 19, I moved to Aarhus, to attend Information Technologies studies at department of Computer Science on Aarhus University. Three years went by, and I completed a bachelor degree in Informations Technologies with specialization in product design.

I am currently finishing first year of my master in Product development at Aarhus University in Denmark, as well.

I have developed a great passion invesitgating the relationship between humans and technology, which I have had the oppunity to stimulate both intellectual and pratical through my education.

Together with a fellow student I have a small company where we create websolutions for our customers. It provide us with a highly relevant student job, and the possibility to learn on many aspects. I know that a study abroad at University of San Diego will provide me with many international qualities, that I and my company can benefit from.

San Diego have for a long time been a city I would like to visit, due to recommendations from friends. I have a clear picture of the atmosphere sorrounding San Diego, with the beautiful and breathtaking La Jolla and the kind-hearted people living there. It would be a privilege to have the chance to walk to class with the sun smiling down on me, and to feel and smell the ocean breeze.

I am a huge fan of basketball, and I have played it for many years myself. Like so many others from outside of America, I am fascinated by the sportsculture surrounding Universities, especially The Tritons. It would be a childhood dream to be a part of this culture, not just following the basket team, but open my eyes for new branches of sport, that we do not have in Denmark, like baseball and water polo.

Through several conferences both in Denmark and Netherland I have acquired great interest in optain knowledge outside of Aarhus University, and exspand my personal network.

I realize the highly competitive demands of the courses, but I have enough ability, ambition and motivation to cope with the requirements for a successful study at the University.

Therefore I would be very proud and happy if I were allowed to enroll at your prestigious University of worldwide reputation, so that I could prove you and myself of my academic and social goals.

I thank you for considering my application and I look forward to your response.

Yours faithfully,

Paw ---