Please help to comment my MBA motivation letter

Dear All,

I just wrote MBA motivation letter for Freiberg Uni in Germany. My background in Uni is Bs of Chemistry. I have 3 years experience in Sales. Now i would like to study further. Please help to share your comment about my letter

Thanks so much

“Stay hungry. Stay foolish.” This phrase means we should always want more, never be content and when you want to do something that others say is foolish, do it anyways. Some people tell me that I am not smart when I made decision to leave my well-paying job and pursue the dream by applying for the IBDEM program in .



When I was a child, anything to do with fragrance fascinates me, which encouraged me to pass the entrance exam into the chemistry class at my hometown’s talented high school and it then became my major at Can Tho University. I and some classmates formed a group to research and study a lot more about how to produce perfume and create new unique scent parallel with the university program. Besides working with my team, I myself also manage time to study sales and marketing. My future goal was to set up a private company selling my own perfume, which is also a way to introduce its beauty to the world.

After 3 years experience in resourcing, developing new project,… in my first and current company, I learnt many knowledge and skills which was very helpful but not enough for my future goal. That’s why the IBDEM is my first choice program, which I hereby commit to attend if offered admission. I will get a chance to learn about every aspect of global business, especially in Developing and Emerging Market where I come from. I well understand the great pressure and challenges that will be presented to me when studying in such a distinguished program as yours. But I cherish the ambition to become a first-class leader and well prepared myself to confront any difficulties.



Such course of Dr. Johannes Stephan “International Corporate Management and MNCs” and “Public Private Partnership in Emerging and Developing countries Project Management” of Dr. Horst Brezinski will provide a solid foundation necessary for me to grow beyond my current experience to develop into the leader of a greater business than a private small company. Moreover, I believe that the experience of studying and possibly working abroad would help me to further develop myself, as well as allow me to gain valuable cultural and social knowledge.

This is all I have to say and again I would like to mention that I am desperate to be a part of this friendly and welcoming environment. My background and ambitions after graduating would make you to extend your sympathetic consideration to my appeal. I consider myself as one of the best candidates you are looking for an MBA Program.





For more details I have enclosed my resume which will give you further information about me. I am desperately looking forward to hearing good news form you

Sincerely,