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Alesandra1984 Posted 18 years ago
Letter Writing

Please Help, thanks :) its my application for master course

0Hello All! 02br
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00I am writing a motivation letter for applying a fashion master course. 02br
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00I am not a native english speaker. I think the words I used are too complicated and not fluent.02br
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00Could anyone give me a help please?? 02br
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00Sandra02br
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00Dear Sir or Madam,02br
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00I am writing to apply for the postgraduate program of fashion design in XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX00. 02br
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00I am very interested in the program that I found the modules are fundamental and well planned which02br
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00are extremely useful for being a designer today. No need to mention that XXX is a prestigious fashion 02br
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00institute in the fashion capital of its reputation of excellent quality and the heritage of craftsmanship. 02br
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00Under the supervision of experienced working professionals and relations within the industry, I am 02br
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00certain that I would be able to propel myself to the height of my career and further develop my skills 02br
00and knowledge in this profession. 00 02br
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00Choosing fashion as my career has never been a quick decision but under a great passion and 02br
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00enthusiasm that I had developed since I was at very young age. After finished my A-Level and 02br
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00short courses in fashion design in Hong Kong, I arrived in the UK where I had done the BA (Hons)02br
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00Fashion Design in the University of XXXXXXXXXX. Then 00I was working as an assistant designer 02br
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00for a luxury label in Hong Kong specialized in eveningswear 00and bridalswear where I have developed02br
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00 my specialized skills in bias cut draping, embroidery, 00beading and how to work closely with the 02br
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00design director in order to develop a collection and to 00maintain high standard of quality. 02br
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00Last year I attended a BAC 00 Paris where I have02br
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00learnt more about the French fashion culture and 00production. I have been doing several internships02br
00as a design and production assistant during my 00study in Paris.00 02br
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00To be a fashion designer and develop my own business are my career goal. For a time, I was 02br
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00uncertain of my career path that how can I achieve my goal. I found out that even with hard 02br
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00working and enthusiasm would not be enough for success but also I need to know where that I 02br
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00want to go and how that I want to go. I found that a designer today is no longer just a designer 02br
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00to create an innovative designs but also a manager and a art director with a high understanding 02br
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00in brand management and in a commercial and financial aspect. I would like to attend this 02br
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00postgraduate programme that I believe I can do more and develop these kinds of skills that I have 02br
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00lacked. It is my intent to expand my skills and knowledge to attain success in my profession. I am02br
00certain that the course will boost my career and propel myself to another height.00 00Thank you very much for your time and your consideration. 00 02br
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00Yours faithfully,00 02br
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00Sandra00 010id1
  

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02br 02br 00I don't know if this is a good idea or not, but perhaps it's not a bad idea, after your very first sentence, to start your letter with an acknowledgement that English is not your first language, rather than having someone else make it perfect English. courses? Does the catalog really list "modules"?

  • 02br 02br 00I don't know if this is a good idea or not, but perhaps it's not a bad idea, after your very first sentence, to start your letter with an acknowledgement that English is not your first language, rather than having someone else make it perfect English.
  • courses?
  • Does the catalog really list "modules"?
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  • 02font 00This is an odd way to start.
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0Hi Sandra, and welcome to the forums.02br
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00I don't know if this is a good idea or not, but perhaps it's not a bad idea, after your very first sentence, to start your letter with an acknowledgement that English is not your first language, rather than having someone else make it perfect English. Something like "English is not my first language, so I must hope that the wo
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0Dear Sir or Madam,02br
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00I am writing to apply for the postgraduate program of fashion design in ***00. 02br
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00I am very interested in the program. I find the modules fundamental and well planned, which w00ill be extremely useful. I believe that *** is a prestigious fashion 02br
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00institute in the fashion capita

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