Please Help Review My IELTS Writing Task 2?

It is not necessary for people to travel to other places to learn about the culture. We can learn as much as from books, films, and the Internet. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is true that the ubiquity of informational resources namely printed materials and the Internet has allowed people to learn about different cultures distantly. Therefore, there is an assertion that traveling to other locations to deepen each person’s understanding of other communities is needless. Personally, I firmly disagree with this perspective as whether which means of learning is optimal depends on individuals.

Opponents of this belief argue that cultural values must be learned directly. Firstly, by going to other tourist destinations, commuters can hear many accounts of a community told by the denizens. This enables them to know some hidden truths and myths more comprehensively and offers them valuable and enjoyable learning experience rather than just adopting online information uninterestingly and boringly. Secondly, traveling also affords people a chance to sample many cuisines and engage in a host of cultural activities. By spending time in a community, they can personally explore the culture without being influenced externally.

Nonetheless, proponents of this idea may claim that the acquisition of a culture can be facilitated by online sources or books. Undoubtedly, these sources of information can eliminate spatial and temporal barriers such as traffic jams and inherently problematic procedures of traveling, however, still guarantee the availability of information. The coronavirus pandemic perfectly exemplifies its benefits. During the lockdown, the Vietnamese government has imposed a moratorium on tourism, so many people, especially avid globetrotters, cannot commute to tourist attractions or historic spots to extend their understanding of other communities. As a result, the real-life cultural acquisition seems unattainable. Therefore, watching films or reading books to deepen cultural knowledge is highly preferable for culture enthusiasts.

In conclusion, though I admit the proliferation of the Internet and travel books is conducive to understanding other communities, it would be imprudent to say that experiential traveling is rendered worthless. I am of the opinion that offline and remote “traveling” should be encouraged to gain deep insights into other societies.

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