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Annie Yip Posted 14 years ago
Please help proof reading my sonnet thx!!!
hi! my English teacher wants me to write an iambic pentameter sonnet but I'm not really sure if I did the unstressed and stressed sound right. PLEASE HELP THANK YOU!!!
Here is my sonnet. It is about our Earth.
If you remember flowers dance in breeze
If you remember grass sing in morn
If you remember birds rest on the trees
If you remember Earth slowly turns
With love and kind, your father created you,
who meant to be the pride of all creation.
But Adam ate the Apple from Eve;
The fool has Crooked and twisted the generation.
And you cut down the trees once stood on ground
And you hunt all the animals singing song.
And you become the bane of life, brought
destructions. The joy and peace are gone.
And mother earth looks upon you with her eyes.
Painful, agonizing, and filled with tears.
Thank you!!!
Here is my sonnet. It is about our Earth.
If you remember flowers dance in breeze
If you remember grass sing in morn
If you remember birds rest on the trees
If you remember Earth slowly turns
With love and kind, your father created you,
who meant to be the pride of all creation.
But Adam ate the Apple from Eve;
The fool has Crooked and twisted the generation.
And you cut down the trees once stood on ground
And you hunt all the animals singing song.
And you become the bane of life, brought
destructions. The joy and peace are gone.
And mother earth looks upon you with her eyes.
Painful, agonizing, and filled with tears.
Thank you!!!
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Not perfected, but now at least the 2nd and 4th rhyme and the meter is right: If you remember flowers dance in breeze, If you remember grass sing by the bournes, If you remember birds rest on the trees, If you remember Earth that slowly turns: With love and kindness , ***, He fathered you, who meant to be the pride of all surveyed. But Adam ate the Apple got from Eve; The fool has bent and twisted all us made. We cut down all the trees once stood on ground And hunt down all the animals and sing.
- Not perfected, but now at least the 2nd and 4th rhyme and the meter is right: If you remember flowers dance in breeze, If you remember grass sing by the bournes, If you remember birds rest on the trees, If you remember Earth that slowly turns: With love and kindness , ***, He fathered you, who meant to be the pride of all surveyed.
- But Adam ate the Apple got from Eve; The fool has bent and twisted all us made.
- We cut down all the trees once stood on ground And hunt down all the animals and sing.
- And we become the bane of life, bring death.
- So joy and peace are gone —they're on the wing.
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Not perfected, but now at least the 2nd and 4th rhyme and the meter is right:
If you remember flowers dance in breeze,
If you remember grass sing by the bournes,
If you remember birds rest on the trees,
If you remember Earth that slowly turns:
With love and kindness, ***, He fathered you,
who meant to be the pride of all surv
If you remember flowers dance in breeze,
If you remember grass sing by the bournes,
If you remember birds rest on the trees,
If you remember Earth that slowly turns:
With love and kindness, ***, He fathered you,
who meant to be the pride of all surv
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