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Zacc Posted 14 years ago
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Please help proof read my motivation letter

Hello everyone, could you please help in proof reading my motivation letter.

Thank you in advance.

I am fascinated with joy and enthusiasm to be a prospective student of the department of philosophy, University of London international programme.

A glance at my past academic pursuit, after graduating from secondary school education, I gained admission to the University of the xxxxxx where I obtained an Associate of Arts degree in xxxxxxxx. During my studies, I learnt about how philosophers aided the development of the modern Western nations; also learnt is the need for the use of philosophical methodology in assessing issues that today’s world is confronted with.

I have since (during and after my studies) being working with a non- governmental organization in Zurich, Switzerland. My area of job description covers: caring for the homeless, immigrants as well as the elderly people.

My current job description, having to do with social work, and my constant encounter with people who are mostly in search for ‘meaning,’ drives me to want to study philosophy; more so, to aid growth and to improve my grasp on the art of leaving; to gain a better understanding about myself and the world around me.

My professional goal is to take part in the transformation process of my home country. My country is in dire need of individuals with clarity of thought, advanced communication skills, breadth of vision, abilities to think critically, creatively, and analytical and interpretive capacities. I believe that the intellectual rigor I will develop will enable me to possess the above mentioned.

I am sure that by choosing the University of London international programme, my motivational reasons for wanting to study Philosophy, as stated above will be met.

Thank you so much for considering my application. I look forward to your positive response.
Kind regards,
  

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I received my Associate of Arts degree [ This would be a 2-year program only, not university graduation; are you sure that you did not receive a 4-year bachelor's degree? ] in Philosophy from the University of ABC in 2010. During my studies, I discovered the contributions of philosophers to the development of the modern Western nations and the need for philosophical methodology in assessing today's global issues.

  • I received my Associate of Arts degree [ This would be a 2-year program only, not university graduation; are you sure that you did not receive a 4-year bachelor's degree?
  • ] in Philosophy from the University of ABC in 2010.
  • During my studies, I discovered the contributions of philosophers to the development of the modern Western nations and the need for philosophical methodology in assessing today's global issues.
  • Since graduation, I have been working with a non-governmental organization in Zurich, Switzerland, caring for immigrants, the homeless, and the elderly.
  • This social work and my frequent encounters with people who are in search of meaning in their lives have driven me to want to study philosophy for my own intellectual growth: to improve my grasp of the art of living and to gain a better understanding of myself and the world around me.
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I received my Associate of Arts degree [This would be a 2-year program only, not university graduation; are you sure that you did not receive a 4-year bachelor's degree?] in Philosophy from the University of ABC in 2010. During my studies, I discovered the contributions of philosophers to the development of the modern Western nations and the need for philosophical methodology in assessing t

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