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Osee Posted 18 years ago
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please help polish my writing (I), kind of urgent.



Would anyone help me polish the paragraph below? Thank you so much!
Especially,
1) do you think the red parts are good?
2) How to make the first sentence more concise?

Currently I hold both a bachelor’s degree of science in applied mathematics and a master’s degree of science in mathematics from University of Toronto. The studies towards these degrees gave me a solid training in analysis and scientific programming, among other things. Further, the experience of my current research towards PhD in Mathematics gives me a good general grasp of how to carry on research, it also makes me aware about my strengths and weaknesses in doing research. In addition, I had one-year work experience of doing digital medical image processing in GE. My main task was designing algorithms for X-ray and CT images and implementing them using C++. With all these background, I think I can make fast progress in the study of biostatistics.


  

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Osee Would anyone help me polish the paragraph below? Thank you so much! Especially, 1) do you think the red parts are good?

— Yankee

  • Osee Would anyone help me polish the paragraph below?
  • Thank you so much!
  • Especially, 1) do you think the red parts are good?
  • 2) How to make the first sentence more concise?
  • Currently I hold both a bachelor’s degree (of science) in applied mathematics and a master’s degree (of science) in mathematics from University of Toronto.
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Osee
Would anyone help me polish the paragraph below? Thank you so much!
Especially,
1) do you think the red parts are good?
2) How to make the first sentence more concise?


Currently I hold both a ba
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This is so great, Yankee. It reads much much better than before. Here is a question: is your replacing "can" by "will be able to" in the last sentence just for emphasis?

Thank you so much for your time polishing my writing!
Yankee
Osee

Would anyone help me polish the paragraph below? Thank you so much!
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