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Croatian Posted 21 years ago
Letter Writing
Please help - Motivation letter for BA-Undergraduate Degree
Dear EF-Team,
I have written this letter by my self and a friend of mine has corrected it, but I’m still not sure if the style is handsome enough.
I would also be very thankful 4 some spellchecking and your comment on the overall impression!
It would be very nice if you could help me…
Throughout my education in my secondary school I have always been most interested in lingual and economic subjects and as you can see from my attached curriculum vitae I have constantly sought to gain experience abroad. When I heard from one of your students that there is a university in Milan that has courses in English I started my research about ***. Consequently I found out many interesting facts about your institution and the offered courses in Business and Economics, but decisive for me to send out this application, was the program of your Undergraduate Degree in Business Administration and the fact that I can stay in Italy and improve my Italian surrounded by native speakers and improve my English knowledge by studying in English.
Furthermore I am fascinated by Italy and the Italian way of life, because I have learned many facts about the Italian habits and culture at school. I have travelled to many Italian cities and regions in order to find out more about the history and culture of this country. Since my childhood I have always wanted to live in Italy and still do because the people have a similar mentality to the ones in *** which makes me feel comfortable and at home.
My main field of interests are contemporary studies dealing with business management and economics. In my secondary school I have always been affected by the subjects hospitality management and economics. Throughout three of five years our class was cooperating with the hotel "Intercontinental Vienna" in a spirit of partnership, and due to this fact I have already gained much experience in the practical application of administration and management.
I am talented in languages. I speak English, Croatian and German fluently and have studied Italian for five years at school. I have also taught Italian and Croatian as a tutor and one of my next goals is to learn an eastern language. I am very communicative and like to work with people, those have been very important skills during my education for the tourism industry. I am very enthusiastic when it comes to active jobs, I like to work under pressure and to develop new skills. I have high organizational skills and as you can see from my attached curriculum vitae I have already gained some experience in this field. Considering all these facts I have decided to study Business Administration of Economics and Management and I am sure that in the future I will be working in this sector.
I see myself as an enthusiastic, socially concerned and innovative member of society. I have always been hard working to achieve all goals I have set for myself. As you can see from my enclosed diplomas, during my secondary school I have enrolled for all extra subjects offered. Once I focus myself on a goal I head to it until I have accomplished what I wanted to do. The next goal on my list is to get accepted for Bocconi and achieve a Fellowship-Program. I believe that one should follow his ambitions and dreams and never give up even though there are many surprises in life. I have set this goal for myself and I will do everything I can to achieve it because that is my desire.
Yours sincerely
I have written this letter by my self and a friend of mine has corrected it, but I’m still not sure if the style is handsome enough.
I would also be very thankful 4 some spellchecking and your comment on the overall impression!
It would be very nice if you could help me…
Throughout my education in my secondary school I have always been most interested in lingual and economic subjects and as you can see from my attached curriculum vitae I have constantly sought to gain experience abroad. When I heard from one of your students that there is a university in Milan that has courses in English I started my research about ***. Consequently I found out many interesting facts about your institution and the offered courses in Business and Economics, but decisive for me to send out this application, was the program of your Undergraduate Degree in Business Administration and the fact that I can stay in Italy and improve my Italian surrounded by native speakers and improve my English knowledge by studying in English.
Furthermore I am fascinated by Italy and the Italian way of life, because I have learned many facts about the Italian habits and culture at school. I have travelled to many Italian cities and regions in order to find out more about the history and culture of this country. Since my childhood I have always wanted to live in Italy and still do because the people have a similar mentality to the ones in *** which makes me feel comfortable and at home.
My main field of interests are contemporary studies dealing with business management and economics. In my secondary school I have always been affected by the subjects hospitality management and economics. Throughout three of five years our class was cooperating with the hotel "Intercontinental Vienna" in a spirit of partnership, and due to this fact I have already gained much experience in the practical application of administration and management.
I am talented in languages. I speak English, Croatian and German fluently and have studied Italian for five years at school. I have also taught Italian and Croatian as a tutor and one of my next goals is to learn an eastern language. I am very communicative and like to work with people, those have been very important skills during my education for the tourism industry. I am very enthusiastic when it comes to active jobs, I like to work under pressure and to develop new skills. I have high organizational skills and as you can see from my attached curriculum vitae I have already gained some experience in this field. Considering all these facts I have decided to study Business Administration of Economics and Management and I am sure that in the future I will be working in this sector.
I see myself as an enthusiastic, socially concerned and innovative member of society. I have always been hard working to achieve all goals I have set for myself. As you can see from my enclosed diplomas, during my secondary school I have enrolled for all extra subjects offered. Once I focus myself on a goal I head to it until I have accomplished what I wanted to do. The next goal on my list is to get accepted for Bocconi and achieve a Fellowship-Program. I believe that one should follow his ambitions and dreams and never give up even though there are many surprises in life. I have set this goal for myself and I will do everything I can to achieve it because that is my desire.
Yours sincerely
Top answer
Very well done, Croatian. I have shortened it a bit, you had a bit of 'overkill'-- you don't have to express eagerness so repeatedly: Throughout my secondary education, I have been most interested in linguistic and economic subjects and, as you can see from my attached curriculum vitae, I have constantly sought to gain experience abroad. I have learned many interesting facts about your institution and your offered courses in Business and Economics; decisive for me in sending out this application was the information on your Undergraduate Degree in Business Administration program, where I feel I can improve my Italian surrounded by native speakers and at the same time improve my English by studying in English.
- Very well done, Croatian.
- I have shortened it a bit, you had a bit of 'overkill'-- you don't have to express eagerness so repeatedly: Throughout my secondary education, I have been most interested in linguistic and economic subjects and, as you can see from my attached curriculum vitae, I have constantly sought to gain experience abroad.
- I have learned many interesting facts about your institution and your offered courses in Business and Economics; decisive for me in sending out this application was the information on your Undergraduate Degree in Business Administration program, where I feel I can improve my Italian surrounded by native speakers and at the same time improve my English by studying in English.
- I am fascinated by Italy and the Italian way of life.
- I have travelled to many Italian cities and regions in order to find out more about the history and culture of your country.
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Very well done, Croatian. I have shortened it a bit, you had a bit of 'overkill'-- you don't have to express eagerness so repeatedly:
Throughout my secondary education, I have been most interested in linguistic and economic subjects and, as you can see from my attached curriculum vitae, I have constantly sought to gain experience abroad. I have learned many interesting facts
Throughout my secondary education, I have been most interested in linguistic and economic subjects and, as you can see from my attached curriculum vitae, I have constantly sought to gain experience abroad. I have learned many interesting facts
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Hi, Croatian,
as far as I understand we are applaying for the same Course at the same University and have the same interests (economics, languages, Italy), could you write me directly to my email to talk over some things interested to both of us:
a_c_espam @ email.it, without word "spam".
Looking forward to your answer
as far as I understand we are applaying for the same Course at the same University and have the same interests (economics, languages, Italy), could you write me directly to my email to talk over some things interested to both of us:
a_c_espam @ email.it, without word "spam".
Looking forward to your answer
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