Please help me,this is my third writen task

Topic: Families who send their children to private schools should not be required to pay taxes that support the state education system. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this satement.

My essay:

Nowadays, many people argue with each other on whether or not the government should reduce taxes for parents of children who attend the private schools. While there are many people agree with this point of view, personally my point is we should not.

There are variety of reasons, why we sholud not reduces for people who choose privacy-based schools. First, it would be definitely wrong when we have money reduced for people who absolutely do not need it. And also this will cause a thought that the wealthy families have less money to pay than the poorer. Second, when we have tax discount for these people, this will cause a difficulty in calculating the right amount of money that the rich-based families have to pay. And of course tax offices have to manage this complicated process.

According to my view, we should all be happy to share our money to support the state schools. If we support well for the public schools, we will have better facilities in schooling the youth. Thus, with a well-funded education system,we will have a more productive nation. And also high-quality education-based system can provide the equal opportunoties for the young people. All the members of society have benifits from this include the rich. For example, if they are running a company and they are in the need of well-qualified work force. And indeed the high-quallty public-based schools can easily provide such well-educated, well-qualified and competent employees.

In conclusion, if we support enough financials for the state schools, we will all get many advantages.Thus, we should not have financials concessions for the people who opt for the private states.