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TOPIC:

Around the world, many adults are working from home, and more children are beginning to study from home because technology has become cheaper and more accessible.

Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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In this day and age, it is undeniable that technology has taken an important role in our life. With mention this, we can see that many adults are working from home, and more children are able to study from distance because the technology is useful along with cheaper and more accessible. In this essay, I will discuss its benefits and the back draws.
Technology nowadays is advanced with many huge achievement besides it. For instance, Wifi 5G, digital camera, folding screen smart phone,... these things have many good value, therefore, improved living standard of humans much. These aspects gradually took part in our working and studying system, from searching information, studying subjects online to entertainment. Teachers now just have to sit in front of the screen and teach their students like at campus.
Also, the teacher sometimes unnecessary because students can searching knowledge by themselves without assistance from the seniors, hence makes the study more efficient and easier to absorb
new intellectualites, indeed. However, it comes along with those disadvantages which sometimes cause depression and standstill.
Experts also notice about these vital things that sitting opposite the computer or phone screen can cause such ailments like sore hip, vision loss, migraine,... together with others. Despite neuroscientific warnings, people nowadays still get stick with their hard work that need working with technology, it will not only cause those above troubles but also remain the back draws in future.
Cheaper and more accessible like people thought, but hardly see through full of the aspects around it, they will get stuck in those digital things and their behaviour will be worse, according to psychologists. To give an example, in (A Country), adolescents abuse using the laptops to study to play online games or watch the depraved cultural products.
In conclusion, I think everyone should make probation in their using technology and avoid working with it for a long time, and adjust together monitor their behaviors and feelings as well. Using technology in smart way will make good development, so, be delicate.