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Anonymous Posted 14 years ago
Letter Writing

Please help me write a letter to a foreign school..

I'm want to study abroad so I'm writing a formal letter to a school abroad. I've visited some schools during me holiday in the UK. I have an Aunt who lives there. The school are in her area.
Here is my version, please help me correct any mistakes and add some sentences :

Dear Sir,

Subject: Application For Further Studies At XXXXXXX

My name is Mohankumaar Maha. I am 15 years old and I come from Malaysia. I would like to inform you that I am very interested in continuing my studies at XXXXXX after my Lower Secondary Assessment Examinations this October.

I ended my primary school with 5 distinctions out of 5 subjects which includes English, Mathematics and Science. At this time, I am studying in Kempas School which is known as Sekolah Menengah Kebangsaan Kempas in Malaysia. I am currently in Form 3 and will be siting for my Lower Secondary Assessment Examinations this October.

I like playing drums and getting involved in sports activities. With respect to music, I have earned 3 drum certificates from Trinity College London.

Recently, I was in the United Kingdom on holiday. I took this opportunity to visit some of the schools in London but I was mesmerized by your school. It was very unique. I hope you would give me an opportunity to study in your amazing school.

I hope to hear from you soon. Thank You

Yours faithfully,
XXXXXXXXXXX
(MOHANKUMAAR MAHA)
  

Top answer

Dear Sir/ Madam, Subject: Application for high school at XXXXXXX for the year 20 _ _ reg. I am Mohankumaar Maha from Malaysia. I am very much interested in continuing my studies at XXXXXX after my Lower Secondary Assessment Examinations this October (mention year).

  • Dear Sir/ Madam, Subject: Application for high school at XXXXXXX for the year 20 _ _ reg.
  • I am Mohankumaar Maha from Malaysia.
  • I am very much interested in continuing my studies at XXXXXX after my Lower Secondary Assessment Examinations this October (mention year).
  • I have completed my primary school with 5 distinctions out of 5 subjects which includes English, Mathematics and Science.
  • At present, I am studying in Kempas School which is known as Sekolah Menengah Kebangsaan Kempas in Malaysia.
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Dear Sir/ Madam,

Subject: Application for high school at XXXXXXX for the year 20 _ _ reg.

I am Mohankumaar Maha from Malaysia. I am very much interested in continuing my studies at XXXXXX after my Lower Secondary Assessment Examinations this October (mention year).

I have completed my primary school with 5 distinctions out of 5 subjects which includes English, Mathemati
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the first thing would be to gather enough information about the school and the subject/courses they offer, then you can now apply thereby being specific.

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