Please, help me with writing style

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Please, help me with the writing style. I need to stick to one basic stylistic tool here. Based on Isaac Lee's styles to attract the readers. Everything is included into the 80+ pages linguistic analysis with business tips to get published. Only One Way to Get Published (Professional Tip) is the first tutorial written by Isaac Lee and shared on https://www.sierracollege.edu/about-us/public-relations/blog.php and his portfolio on [commercial writing service link removed by moderator. We do not endorse any such services. Do not include links to them in your posts.]

Here's what I've written so far:

He stopped for a moment and recalled all his previous masterpieces. He was so proud, so excited and still so desperately willing to create more and more. As if there were a black hole in his room that devoured everything he fabricated. His strokes were tiny strings of the most powerful and mysterious human possession. And that was the prettiest thing he had ever encountered.

No time for dreaming. He must act. He must be quick and as always scrupulous with the victim choice. Today, he wanted her to be blond. Her mother had curly blond hair and when she bent over him to say good night and kiss him on the forehead, the smell of the curls teased and tormented him for the whole night.