PLEASE HELP ME WITH TRANSLATION FROM FRENCH

I've translated these from french and would appreciate it deeply if someone could look over these sentences I've translated from French to English.

1 When it takes this long it means it's not going to work.
2 Ill pass for a cheater in/to their eyes.
3 No one will be harmed in the process.
4 There is a better chance that your child will be a smoker than not if you smoke.
5 Your people will pay the price of ignorance/for their ignorance.
6 I'm not suited to be director so he will be assuming the position of director until further notice.
7 This scene is that much more intense having scene the beginning of the show when she saves his life. Now for him to be betraying him is wrong.
8 The sun rises earlier in the east than in the west. (is this grammatical and is this a fact?)
9 Did I have to get shot for you to come see me.
10 We went against the authority of the director.
It's too early not to go to sleep.

Thank you