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Babyblue_girl08 Posted 18 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing

Please help me with this paragraph

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01font00 please check this paragraph for me..may thanks indavance.02font02br
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00 The several things that annoying me is people keep asking about your life, such as love life,lifestyle,general,ect. I hate people ask those question it so irritate me. They should know people dont like to share their privacy to other people they didn't know. As for me tehy should repect other privacy. Another technique is when i have a bad hair day. That thing is so annoying me.i hated my hair when it dried and oily. Im sure every girl has a bad hair day.It embarrasing and uncomfortable when you have a bad hair day in school or in work. Being lazy is also annoying me. I hate to see people lazy not doing anything and they just sit there for other do for them. The last thing is something slowly, such as loading, drive slow, doing slowly ,ect. For example when i download something in my computer,it said it take 10 to 15 minutes,but sometimes it take like half an hour. I know people have different thing to annoying. i will try my best to control my patience of those things. 0-
  

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02br 01i 00I have underlined some problem areas. You have not proofread your essay very carefully. 02u 00 I hate01u 00 people ask02u 00 01u 00thosequestion02u 00 01u 00it so02u 00 01u 00irritate02u 00 me.

  • 02br 01i 00I have underlined some problem areas.
  • You have not proofread your essay very carefully.
  • 02u 00 I hate01u 00 people ask02u 00 01u 00thosequestion02u 00 01u 00it so02u 00 01u 00irritate02u 00 me.
  • They should know people 01u 00dont02u 00 like to sharetheir privacy01u 00 to02u 00 other people they 01u 00didn't02u 00 know.
  • As for 01u 00me tehy02u 00 should01u 00repect02u 00 01u 00other02u 00 privacy.
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01i00I have underlined some problem areas. You have not proofread your essay very carefully. Leave a space after commas:02i02br
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00The several things that 01u00annoying02u00 me 01u00is people02u00 keep asking about 01u00your02u00life, such 01u00as love02

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