Please help me with this IELTS Writing Task 2 ! The topic is: ' The only way to improve road safety is to give much stricter punishment to driving offense. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view ?' . Thank you so much for spending...

It is a striking fact that the number of traffic accidents is increasing dramatically. Many people argue that we should have heavier punishments to driving faults so that the accidents rate would fall. While I agree that punishments are an indispensable factor to improve safety, the drawbacks would arise and there are stills other ways that are equally important.

On the one hand, I would argue that heavier punishment is an effective method of reducing driving offense. The reason is that this can make more people aware of the consequences if they break the laws. In other words, they would follow the laws because of the fear of higher fines, longer time in prisons, etc. This method would be effective, especially for the poor whocould not afford to the higher fines. For example, if a person is punished and is fined eight to ten million dong, they will be aware of their faults and have more concentration on safety rules so as to avoid being fined once more time.

On the other hand, I also think that there are still some drawbacks in this method. First, many people just follow the rules hostily. It means that they will not obey the safety rules if there are no police on the road, for example. Second, there will be many serious accidents because they do not know the underlying reasons of why they have to wear a helmet, etc. There are still other ways to improve the traffic safety. Raising awareness of inhabitants about the horrible consequences of driving offence is a possible solution, which can make the drivers realize the importance of driving correctly.

In conclusion, while punishments certainly have impacts on the drivers’ behaviors to change, there are still many minus points in this method and beside that, there are others ways to change, namely raising people’s awareness.