Please help me with this IELTS Writing Task 1 Essay

Hello teachers, this is my latest essay for Writing Task 1. I know it contains many errors, I hope that you can point them out so I can complete this essay. Thank you so much

Task

The line graph compares the annual incomes of three bake houses in Calgary from 2000 to 2010.

Overall, there were remarkable uptrends in the earnings of both Amandine Bakery and Bolo Cakery, while Mari Bakery underwent a considerable fall over the period. Additionally, in 2000, Mari was the bakery with the highest yearly income, however, Amandine Bakery earned more money than the others in 2010.

In 2000, the revenue of Amandine Bakery started at approximately $60000 per year, while the figure for Bolo Cakery and Mari Bakeshop were $20000 and $80000, respectively. Over the six years since 2000, the amount of money earned by Amandine Bakery hardly changed and reached $60000 in 2006, whereas the figure for Bolo Bakery rose to nearly $40000 in 2003, then remained stable until 2006.

In the next four years, the yearly earning of Mari Bakeshop continued to fall, and dropped to half of its figure in 2000. By contrast, Bolo Cakery experienced steady increase in annual income to over $60000 in 2010, while the figure of Amandine Bakery made its way up to over $100000 per year. (183 words)