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Jennifertran Posted 8 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing

Please help me with this describing topic!

You guys please correct my writing!I'm trying to do my utmost. It's up to you if there is something that needs to be paraphrased. Thank you so much!------------Here is the topic: Describe a way of relaxing that you consider particularly effective and explain why relaxation is thought to be so important in today’s world. --------------And this is my writing: In modern times, people run to work and then they rush home for housework. The such fast-paced life makes them so stressed that they may get mental issues. Therefore, spending some time every day to chill out after work is critically important.

First of all, I highly recommend that people should do sport regularly which helps with not only physical but aslo mental health. The sport strongly suggested is swimming which interests people at all ages. Participating in this kind of activity, you will have a chance to work out all over, which brings you fitness and complete rest. Actually, many research studies showed that when people take part in sport activities, their brains release endorphin which makes them happier. So this is really good news for motivating people to do sport, isn't it?

Next, relaxation plays a vital role in human lives nowadays which are dead tired of working too much. In fact, relaxing is the way human bodies get recovered themselves after hours doing such work. What if a person just work and have no chance whatsoever to recuperate himself? Such situation may cause turnout which leads to mass health problems such as stress, or even depression. There is no need to see those problems to act, for you can take a look at what is going on like whether you have no energy to give, or you just eat, sleep and dream work. And if the response is yes, you need to take prompt actions to get your health improved, otherwise you know what the reply is then. Some activities you can do like doing certain sport, staying home and just having a rest, or even having a vacation really help.

In short, no matter how much work you have to accomplish, you have to set your time to get yourself relaxed. Letting your body have chances to recharge batteries regularly helps you always being positive and effective at work.
  
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