Please help me with the motivation letter?

Hello. I am applying for a fashion design course. And I need to write an motivational letter. I don't know how I wrote it. Please correct my mistakes. Any tip will be great. Thank u.

Dear Sir/Madam,
I have always been interested in the fashion and the way it affects our lives. When thinking about my future career, I see myself in a position of fashion designer and having my own fashion line. In the future I would like to open [the] first fashion house in (my country) and develop fashion world in my country. Furthermore, I want to enter in Asian market. Designing new clothes, accessories, and bags is something that really excites me. Ever since my childhood I was really interested in art and fashion design. I think it’s because I grew up in family of artists - my grandfather is an artist and my father is a fashion designer.

I attended (school) open days 2 times and met with its stuffs. After that I was fully sure I need to apply to (school). Studying at (school) is a perfect choice for me both academically and experientially. As the university is well known for its fashion design courses, I expect to be able to start a successful career after I graduate. Moreover, I have a skill for drawing and taking photography. Also I have an interest in other fields of design such as graphic and interior design. I have a passion for travel and for understanding different cultures, so the opportunity to meet students from all over the world who are interested in fashion and study fashion design in capital of fashion are the things I put upon much value. I hope that the diversity and academic excellence of that course will bring out the best in me.

I believe that I am a suitable person to study fashion design at your school. I like to design new clothes, bring new ideas and design extraordinary things. I know the value of teamwork and hard work are corner stones of success in fashion industry, so now I am taking a teamwork course and drawing lessons. Success is something that makes my world turn around.

Thank you very much for considering my request. I am looking forward to having the opportunity to study at your school and to make a great contribution to your community.
Yours faithfully,
(My name)