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Hương Giang 7711 Posted 5 years ago
Grammar

Please help me with my writing. Thank you very much.

This is my free writing for practicing writing skill. I wonder if I have any mistakes in grammar, structure, content and so on. I really need your help, please correct it for me. Thank you very much.


Essay

LUearning, a word that is very easy to understand because each of us is and has been learning but to understand the real meaning of learning, it’s another story. Learning is very familiar to everyone, we can see many parents force their children to go to school and hope in the future they can make money. So what is learning? why learning is so meaningful? Well, like other kids, I were expected to study well when I was young so that I could go to university, had a seat at a good company with a steady salary and lived a normal life but every day behold the youth can’t find out the beauty of knowledge, underrated the education, don’t understand their responsibilities to their country, their family and themselves, some children want to go to school but they have a financial burden that prevents their chances to be successful and seeing society out there is full of injustice, dolorous and despair makes my heartbroken, I’m thinking a lot about I want to do something to fix this situation, I want everyone to know that we learning not to make money or because our parents tell us to learn, we learn so that we can find out who we are, to gain a fascinating insight into our civilization, how diverse and colourful the world is and learn how to love yourself, to nurture our soul. That the reasons promote me to be a teacher, I want to complete my knowledge, get a passionate and dedicated Finnish’s education, have the opportunity to change the future, the world. I believe if we recognize the large value that learning brings, the world will be better.

  

Top answer

Most of your sentences run together and lose grammatical integrity. You need to write clear, logical ideas not a stream of consciousness. Learn about comma splices and how to avoid them because it is a very common mistake that you make.

  • Most of your sentences run together and lose grammatical integrity.
  • You need to write clear, logical ideas not a stream of consciousness.
  • Learn about comma splices and how to avoid them because it is a very common mistake that you make.
  • htm LUearning , (???
  • No comma.
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Most of your sentences run together and lose grammatical integrity. You need to write clear, logical ideas not a stream of consciousness.

Learn about comma splices and how to avoid them because it is a very common mistake that you make.

https://chompchomp.com/terms/commasp

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