Please help me with my writing task 2 in IELTS exam

As a result of electronic inventions such as the computer and television, people do less physical activity, and this is having a negative effect on their health.

To what extend do you agree or disagree?

It is undeniable that electronic devices do bring many benefits to our daily life, but

we can not overlook the negative effects that they have. While providing plenty of

entertainment forms, TV or computers also prevent people from taking physical

exercises.

It can be easily seen that, nowadays, people spend most of their spare time staying

indoors and watching TV or playing games on their computers. Firstly, this would

bring many serious health problems. When people keep their eyes glued to screens

for several hours, waves from computers and wifi devices may cause headaches. In

addition, social media like Facebook, Twitter,.. not have a positive impact on the

mental health of children, studies show. Besides that, people who work with a

computer sitting down for a long time, so they do not do more physical

movements. This is one of the factors that made more people obese, and this

affects their health when they are older.

However, when it comes to the benefits of modern technologies on people's fitness,

it is too obvious to ignore. I believe that the advantage of electronic devices is not

only reducing human labor but also improve living conditions. People can do their

job better by using electronic inventions. Bankers, for instance, use calculators to

keep money secure. Moreover, current technologies help people stay healthy.

Doctors use X-ray machines to take pictures of bones and other body parts. Many

diseases could be treated in time by early detection.

In conclusion, even with various above-mentioned benefits, the negative effects

that electronic devices bring are still not noticeable.