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The bar chart compares three income groups in terms of 3 different types of fast food in UK in 1990.
Overall, it is noticeable that there were differences in each of the food eaten. Also, the low income group spent the lowest amount

People in high income group spent their income more on hamburger, at 42 pence a week, compared to 17 pence on fish and chips and 19 pence on pizza. In the average income group, they also spent more on hamburger, at 32 pence a week. Although their spending on hamburger was lower than the high income group, their expenditure on fish and chips was higher, at 25 pence a week. Their spending on pizza accounted for the lowest figure, which was only 12 pence.

By contrast, people spent more on fish and chips in the low income group, at 16 pence per week. However, their spending on hamburger and pizza were much lower, at 14 and 6 pence respectively.

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First of all, this task is flawed. There is no indication of the units on the Y-Axis in the instructions. Some publications of this task give millions of pounds sterling for one year, 1990; others give average pence per week per person. So you must make your best guess and put that assumption in the first paragraph.

The bar chart compares three income groups in terms of

The bar chart compares three income groups in terms of 3 different types of fast food in UK in 1990.
Overall, it is noticeable that there were differences in each of the food eaten. Also, the low income group spent the lowest amount

Feedback:

First sentence:

The description in the opening paragraph is quite poor. How do you compare people and types of food? That makes no sense. Here is a sample opening paragraph:

The grouped bar chart shows how income level is related to spending on fast food. In particular, the average weekly per-person spending of people in each of three income groups (high, average and low) is plotted for each food type: pizza, hamburger, and fish and chips. The data is from the UK in 1990 and the units are in pence.

Second sentence.

You have changed the main point of the paragraph from describing the figure to pointing out the main features. You must start a new paragraph.

Your first point ("There were differences") is neither interesting nor significant. Of course, there are differences. I would be shocked if there were no differences. An examiner would not be impressed. You must follow the instructions: Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

In the second paragraph, "overall", report the main features of the infographic. What is the most important thing that you observe?

The third paragraph looks pretty good.

People in the high income group spent ~~their income~~ more on hamburger, at 42 pence a week, compared to 17 pence on fish and chips and 19 pence on pizza. In the average income group, they also spent more on hamburger, at 32 pence a week. Although their spending on hamburger was lower than that of the high income group, their expenditure on fish and chips was higher, at 25 pence a week. Their spending on pizza accounted for the lowest amount ~~figure~~, which was only 12 pence. By contrast, people ~~spent more on fish and chips~~ in the low income group spent more on fish and chips, at 16 pence per week. However, their spending on hamburger and pizza was ~~were~~ much lower, at 14 and 6 pence respectively.

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