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In many countries, schools have severe problems with student behavior.What do you think are the causes of this?What solutions can you suggest?It is true that school leaders around the world are experiencing difficulty with students’ serious behavior problems. There could be several reasons for this, and I think school leaders, societies and parents can take step to mitigate this issue.In modern world, there are three possible explanations for behavior problems in students. One reason is the lack of care among parents and other members in family during the period of children’s development.  Clearly, it is the family weak tie that makes them feel disconnected, and easily learn bad behaviors from bad friends. Another contributing factor is the explosion of violent content via the mass media or video games. In fact, nearly two – thirds of TV programs and most video games contain physical violence. In addition to this, the period of transition for teenager can cause bad behaviors due to the hormonal changes inside their bodies. The situation calls for prompt actions. One measure would be that parents should spend more time for their children at each developmental stages to guide, encourage and share. It is obvious that if students are received good guiding and encourage from their families, this will help them develop properly both physical and mental health. Another sustainable solution is that schools should increase moral lessons and have more discussion about developmental psychology of their age in order for them to behave well at school. Finally, programs on mass media should be strictly censored to protect young children from violent content.In conclusion, it is unavoidable that students will have several behavioral problems during developmental stages before they become mature in the future. However, I believe that if family and society fulfill their basic needs for love and sympathy, children will know how to behave properly with other people.

AlpheccaStars · Accepted Answer

It is true that school leaders around the world are experiencing difficulty with students’ serious behavior problems. There could be several reasons for this, and I think school leaders, societies and parents can take steps to mitigate this ~~issue~~.
In the modern world, there are three possible explanations for behavior problems in students. One reason is the lack of care among parents and other members in the family during the period of ~~children’s~~ the child's development. Clearly, it is the family's weak ties that makes them feel disconnected, and easily learn bad behaviors from bad friends. Another contributing factor is the explosion of violent content via the mass media or video games. In fact, nearly two-thirds of TV programs and most video games contain physical violence. In addition to this, the period of transition for a teenager can cause bad behaviors due to the hormonal changes inside their bodies.
The situation calls for prompt actions. One measure would be that parents should spend more time with their children at each developmental stage to guide, encourage and share. It is obvious that if students ~~are~~ receive good guidance and encouragement from their families, ~~this~~ it will help them properly develop ~~properly~~ both physical and mental health. Another sustainable solution is that schools should increase moral lessons and have more discussions with students about developmental psychology ~~of their age~~ in order for them to behave well at school. Finally, programs on mass media should be strictly censored to protect young children from violent content.
In conclusion, it is unavoidable that students will have several behavioral problems during developmental stages before they become mature ~~in the future~~. However, I believe that if family and society fulfill their basic needs for love and sympathy, children will know how to behave properly with other people.

Ngan Ho · Answer

I'm preparing for my Ielts test on my own. Therefore I really appreciate your help.

AlpheccaStars · Answer

Ngan HoI'm preparing for my Ielts test on my own. Therefore I really appreciate your help.

Good luck. Keep posting so you will have feedback on your progress.

Ngan Ho · Answer

This is my new essay. Have a look at it. Thank you

I dont know exactly how to express some ideas as the way native speakers do, so there are many mistakes about collocations and grammar.

question:
Some people think that large, impressive buildings are important for a city. Others believe that the money should be spent on improving schools and hospitals.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

People think that large, impressive buildings are important for a city. Others believe that the money should be spent on schools and hospitals. Discuss both views and give your own opinions.
People have different views with regard to the question whether a city should invest money on constructing large, impressive buildings or developing schools and hospital. In my view, educational and medical improvement should be the most important priority for a city.
On the one hand, the benefits of impressive – looking building construction is evident. Firstly, tall buildings allow more people and workplaces to be parcel of land, therefore this helps local authorities save land territory for other projects. Secondly, most buildings with seriously amazing architecture around the world are famous tourist attractions. Petronas Twin Towers, for example, which is the most iconic sight in Kuala Lumpur, promotes the beautiful image of this city all over the world. As a result, buildings like this attract millions of tourist every year to visit their spectacular views.
On the other hand, it is more important that local authorities spend more money on health and education. The reason for this is that schools and hospitals need a huge amount of money for improving their facilities and updating with contemporary equipment to better the quality of life. Additionally, any cases relating to human that arises ought to be well treated by city leaders. This is because when a city council serve the need of its community well, the residents in that city are likely to have better performance at work and study. Therefore, more investment on educational and medical field significantly contributes to a city’s development.
In conclusion, while huge buildings can help a city reduce land lost and increase its incomes from tourism, I believe that schools and hospitals should be received more financial support from local authorities.

AlpheccaStars · Answer

When you have a new essay, make a new thread. That way, more teachers can comment.

People have different views with regard to the question whether a city should invest money on constructing large, impressive buildings or developing schools and hospitals. In my view, educational and medical improvements should be the ~~most important~~ highest priority for a city.
On ~~the~~ one hand, the benefits of impressive-looking building construction is evident. Firstly, tall buildings allow more people and workplaces to be on a parcel of land; therefore this helps local authorities save land ~~territory~~ for other projects. Secondly, most buildings with ~~seriously~~ amazing architecture around the world are famous tourist attractions. Petronas Twin Towers, for example, which is the most iconic sight in Kuala Lumpur, promotes the beautiful image of this city all over the world. As a result, buildings like this attract millions of tourists every year to visit their spectacular views.
On the other hand, it is more important that local authorities spend more money on health and education. The reason for this is that schools and hospitals need a huge amount of money for improving their facilities and updating with contemporary equipment to better the quality of life. Additionally, any cases relating to the community ~~human~~ that arises ought to be well treated by city leaders. This is because when a city council serves the need of its community well, the residents in that city are likely to have better performance at work and school ~~study~~. Therefore, more investment on educational and medical ~~field~~ facilities significantly contributes to a city’s development.
In conclusion, while huge buildings can help a city reduce land lost and increase its income from tourism, I believe that schools and hospitals should be receive more financial support from local authorities.

Ngan Ho · Answer

Thank you. By the way, how can I make a new thread cuz I'm not familiar with the features on this website.

Blue Jay · Answer

Ngan Ho By the way, how can I make a new thread cuz I'm not familiar with the features on this website.

The same way you started this thread

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Anonymous · Answer

Ngan HoIn many countries, schools have severe problems with student behavior.What do you think are the causes of this?What solutions can you suggest?It is true that school leaders around the world are experiencing difficulty with students’ serious behavior problems. There could be several reasons for this, and I think school leaders, societies and parents can take step to mitigate this issue.In modern world, there are three possible explanations for behavior problems in students. One reason is the lack of care among parents and other members in family during the period of children’s development. Clearly, it is the family weak tie that makes them feel disconnected, and easily learn bad behaviors from bad friends. Another contributing factor is the explosion of violent content via the mass media or video games. In fact, nearly two – thirds of TV programs and most video games contain physical violence. In addition to this, the period of transition for teenager can cause bad behaviors due to the hormonal changes inside their bodies. The situation calls for prompt actions. One measure would be that parents should spend more time for their children at each developmental stages to guide, encourage and share. It is obvious that if students are received good guiding and encourage from their families, this will help them develop properly both physical and mental health. Another sustainable solution is that schools should increase moral lessons and have more discussion about developmental psychology of their age in order for them to behave well at school. Finally, programs on mass media should be strictly censored to protect young children from violent content.In conclusion, it is unavoidable that students will have several behavioral problems during developmental stages before they become mature in the future. However, I believe that if family and society fulfill their basic needs for love and sympathy, children will know how to behave properly with other people.

You should separate your text into sentences and paragraphs. Doing so will make it much easier to read as well as look better. Once you have done that, you can post it here again and wait for another reply.

Ngan Ho · Answer

Thanks. I did seperate my essays, but maybe they aren't clearly displayed on your computer
I'll post them again.

Ngan Ho:

In many countries, schools have severe problems with student behavior.
What do you think are the causes of this?
What solutions can you suggest?
It is true that school leaders around the world are experiencing difficulty with students’ serious behavior problems. There could be several reasons for this, and I think school leaders, societies and parents can take step to mitigate this issue.

In modern world, there are three possible explanations for behavior problems in students. One reason is the lack of care among parents and other members in family during the period of children’s development. Clearly, it is the family weak tie that makes them feel disconnected, and easily learn bad behaviors from bad friends. Another contributing factor is the explosion of violent content via the mass media or video games. In fact, nearly two – thirds of TV programs and most video games contain physical violence. In addition to this, the period of transition for teenager can cause bad behaviors due to the hormonal changes inside their bodies.

The situation calls for prompt actions. One measure would be that parents should spend more time for their children at each developmental stages to guide, encourage and share. It is obvious that if students are received good guiding and encourage from their families, this will help them develop properly both physical and mental health. Another sustainable solution is that schools should increase moral lessons and have more discussion about developmental psychology of their age in order for them to behave well at school. Finally, programs on mass media should be strictly censored to protect young children from violent content.

In conclusion, it is unavoidable that students will have several behavioral problems during developmental stages before they become mature in the future. However, I believe that if family and society fulfill their basic needs for love and sympathy, children will know how to behave properly with other people.

Here is the second essay:

People think that large, impressive buildings are important for a city. Others believe that the money should be spent on schools and hospitals. Discuss both views and give your own opinions.

People have different views with regard to the question whether a city should invest money on constructing large, impressive buildings or developing schools and hospital. In my view, educational and medical improvement should be the most important priority for a city.

On the one hand, the benefits of impressive – looking building construction is evident. Firstly, tall buildings allow more people and workplaces to be parcel of land, therefore this helps local authorities save land territory for other projects. Secondly, most buildings with seriously amazing architecture around the world are famous tourist attractions. Petronas Twin Towers, for example, which is the most iconic sight in Kuala Lumpur, promotes the beautiful image of this city all over the world. As a result, buildings like this attract millions of tourist every year to visit their spectacular views.

On the other hand, it is more important that local authorities spend more money on health and education. The reason for this is that schools and hospitals need a huge amount of money for improving their facilities and updating with contemporary equipment to better the quality of life. Additionally, any cases relating to human that arises ought to be well treated by city leaders. This is because when a city council serve the need of its community well, the residents in that city are likely to have better performance at work and study. Therefore, more investment on educational and medical field significantly contributes to a city’s development.

In conclusion, while huge buildings can help a city reduce land lost and increase its incomes from tourism, I believe that schools and hospitals should be received more financial support from local authorities.

AlpheccaStars · Answer

Ngan HoThank you. By the way, how can I make a new thread

Go to this page and click on "Write a new post"

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