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WRITE DESCRIPTION HEREThe bar chart gives the percentage of females who left school attended tertiary education in five counties (the UK, the USA, Canada, Japan and Germany) in 1970 and 2005. Overall, most of the countries had more female school graduates in 2005 than in 1970, except for Canada with the same number in the two years. Notably, in Japan the afterward figure doubled that of the previous point. In particular, in 2005 the number of British, American, Japanese and German female learners who graduated from school coming to universities and colleges were more than that in 1970 (60, 58, 40 and 55 per cent in comparison with 35, 40, 20 and 50 per cent respectively). France had the same percentage at 60 per cent at both points.

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The bar chart gives the percentage of females who left school attended (ungrammatical) tertiary (wrong word. This word is not used in American English, and it has a different meaning in British English.) education in five counties (the UK, the USA, Canada, Japan and Germany) in 1970 and 2005.

Overall, most of the countries had more female school graduates in 2005 (That may be true, but there is nothing on this chart that gives numbers of graduates. Numbers would be 34,987 or 1,453,900 ) than in 1970, except for Canada with the same number (wrong word) in the two years. Notably, in Japan the afterward figure (bad expression) doubled that of the previous point. (Not good word choice.)

In particular, in 2005 the number (wrong word) of British, American, Japanese and German female learners (wrong word) who graduated from school coming to (ungrammatical) universities and colleges were more than that in 1970 (60, 58, 40 and 55 per cent in comparison with 35, 40, 20 and 50 per cent respectively). (Do not use "respectively" for more than three items.)

France (Is France on this chart?) had the same percentage at 60% in both years. per cent ~~at both points~~

This essay is too long (just over 200 words), but it will give you some ideas.

The bar chart compares the percentage of women who, after graduating high school, immediately continued their education. It gives data for two years, 1970 and 2005, and for people in five different countries, the UK, the USA, Canada, Japan and Germany.

Overall, in 1970, only one of the countries (Canada) had a majority of their female school-leavers continuing their education compared to four of the five in 2005. The exception in that year was Japan. But although it had the smallest percentages in both years, it also had the largest relative gain over the period, doubling from two in ten to four in ten.

In 1970, Canada had the largest percentage, 60%, followed by Germany with half. In third place was the US, at 40%. In the UK just over one-third of women continuing their education, whereas it was only one in five (20%) for Japan. By 2005, the percentages had gone up in all countries except Canada, but it was still the country with the highest proportion; six in every ten. The UK managed to tie Canada for top ranking, coming from about 35% to 60%. Germany had a small gain of 5%, ending at 55%, equal to that of the US. This country had a rise three times that of Germany over the period, 15%, and increased its percentage from 40 to 55%.

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