Please help me with my motivation letter.urgently!

0I will soon apply to college and I need a motivation letter which I have made but I am not sure about it, I am not sure about how good it is and I need your help to tell me what do I have to add or what it is wrong or if I could make a btter formulation. I am applying for scientific study in politics.thanks a lot. Here is my motivation letter.02br
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00 00I can say that I00 00have started to be interested on the Scientific Study of Politics when I discovered the political philosophy00 00and in that moment I understood that00 00this extremely complex mechanism that I have watched some time ago as a simple bystander (spectator) , was based on a couple of00 00well established principles , which were in a continuous00 00change . Written laws, unwritten laws, they all work in such a manner that the whole political mechanism it is not anything else than a joining of these. Starting from this fact, I have been brought to the conviction that, improving the laws, the whole political structure could improve, with big effects upon society. I mentioned the improving, but obviously this process cannot be realized in a viable manner without knowing in detail these laws that govern it .00 00Proceeding in a different way, we are all risking to repeat mistakes made and solved much more before. Human being, by nature, bases its evolution on the mistakes made by the others.00 00After all, this is one of the essential attributes of man kind: to learn from others’ mistakes. Through scientific study of politics I have the certainty that any change I will want to make will depend on the knowledge of hundreds of generations that preceded me, knowledge that I can achieve particularly through the study.02br
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00 00Related to this first part I will be able to formulate the motivation for which I candidate to this Faculty .Many of us complain that we live in an imperfect system, corrupt, which favors the strong ones against the weak ones. What’s more grave is the fact that many limit themselves to only expressing these opinions, without trying to change anything. I certainly believe that confining ourselves with the life we are living, even if it’s full of difficulties, we are actually denying our desire of improving. The evolution is being realized by the discontented, and I am deeply discontented not only by the way things are working in the national plan, but also international. Deep inside me there is a burning desire of change! I want as much possible as I can to bring my contribution to our common sake. But it is impossible for me to realize this ideal without having a strong knowledge about this domain that I want to improve.02br
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00 00Another reason is that I have discovered a central similitude between the desire of the Faculty to select strong personalities with the main object into creating solid elites and responsible and my purpose of becoming a member of a different nature of social elite than the one we know today, a social elite which should have as a main object the intellectual values and not the material ones.02br
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00 00Taking into account all these arguments, I strongly believe the fact that my admittance to this Faculty would be a decisive importance step in realizing all these objectives. That is why I will do my best to convince you that I deserve your confidence and implicitly a place in the Faculty you represent.02br
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